Raise of awarness; Younger are much more aware about issues like environment

Hi im going to take IELTS in april and need 6.5. Thanks for helping me.

Young people are much more aware of and concerd about issues like the enviroment poverty and animal welfare than previous genartions. What is your opinion?

Nowadays, there has been getting bigger issues such as environment, poorness or animal care that people are being educated how to behave and struggle at the schools, platforms or Non Governmental Organizations.

It is impossible to argue against the fact that problems of our world is increasing day by day. People are trying to give a world that more livable which is like what previous generations did. Because in last decades our ancestors had experienced that war and poverty. Therefore, they wanted to ensure us living in peace and welfare. A very good example here is they waited to buy only one bread for days in Cold War years or crisis years. Furthermore, people are more aware of environmental problems. For instance scientist to find out reduce to using petrol which has drawbacks to atmosphere, or recycle use of water. Other example is smoking areas are limited which has a penalty. It was possible to smoke even at the planes till 80s. Also, people can demonstrate when some people or governments damage to natural wild which carried out to Turkish Governments in Istanbul nine months ago. Likewise, animal welfare is growing up which is significant thus some animals are extincting. There are some NOG's do well advertisement to raise of awareness.

To sum up, from my point of view, our generations are well educated because of what previous experienced. Also they did not know anything about Global Warming which appeared this decade. One can deny that our world's opportunities are running out.Hence, we well educated what we have to do and how to tackle it for our world.

Question

Introduction

If I compare your question with your introduction, I think that it is out of topic. You should make introduction as a general information.

Nowadays, the environment poverty and animal welfare is becoming issues which is discussed with people around the world. As such, more interestingly cases for some people than other subject such previous generations. In this essay, I am going to give some own opinion.

Yes you're right. what about main topic? how good is that?

Hi... your examination become closer


to gain your target I suggest you to pay attention about IELTS writing descriptor which can guide your writing as your target band.



I am with tiaDS. Lets us take a closer with your prompt


Let me share little
in this prompt you have topic and task
topic : Young people are much more aware and concern about issue than previous generation
task : giving your opinion
After this breakdown, I hope its easier to construct body and keep you in line with the prompt

Hopefully this helpful enough :)

Pay attention to the structure that Pahan suggested. It is the best for this task if you want to earn a good score and handle your time effectively. Do all your practice sessions follow that essay structure.

I have a small admin request for you. You need to have a more meaningful title in the subject field when you open a new thread. It is a forum rule and it also helps you attract other towards your essay and earn more feedbacks.

Do you write 3 paragraphs? Yes, but tell you the truth, you are playing with fire. You need an extra work to develop more than one argument and in a correctly constructed essay each argument requires a separate paragraph.

The best advice is to have 4 paragraphs for your essay that includes the introduction, the (two arguments between) bodies and the conclusion.