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Questioning Authority: Agree or Disagree (GRE Issue Essay)


deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 7, 2012   #1
The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority. Write a response, in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your positions.

"Question Authority," the ubiquitous bumper sticker in late seventies suggested to question every existing authority which could be parents, employers or as big as the government. This aberration is still relevant and practicable today, despite the wide agreement that authority; refers to the government institutions in this essay; have an obvious intent of fostering society's well-being, residents' continued watchdog mentality contributes to enhance conditions of their social surroundings. In other words, peoples supporting good ideas of authorities and rejecting or helping to amend unfruitful agendas are conducive to ideal society.

First, government authorities are bigger in scale and often complex in composition compared to individual or community. Besides their own intricacy, they have to focus for larger areas. This might prohibit the institutions from focusing on small problems of any particular area, which could be "huge" for the residents but nominal for authority compared to big problems in other areas. They might divert the resources into considerably higher important area. Such indifference on small problems might transform it into chronic and incurable.

As it is known, "Prevention is better than cure," people should question authorities before a small ameliorable problem turn into unceasing or needs more money to contain. For example, Japanese government said that, Fukushima nuclear disaster caused by the devastating tsunami was because of Japanese peoples' reluctance in questioning authority.

Second, while authorities are often elected through the majority of votes, the susceptibility of favoring their supporters' neighborhoods or their voting blocks and paying little or no attention to the rival or opponents areas cannot be negated. Such partialities attribute to unequal dissemination of services, physical infrastructure, or natural resources. Local residents' delegation or media coverage helps to avoid such circumstances. We learn some issues only after questioning authority.Informations sometime designated as "classified" by authorities come out after harrying government . This helps to keep government honest and stop unethical practice, if not at least lessens.

Opponents of this idea argue that questioning the authority might jeopardize sensitive issues like religious harmony, foster rebellion and create chaos and unrest. Such sentiments are undeniable but great social changes have always come only after questioning the authority. Whether it is Dr Martin Luther King; Mahatma Gandhi; or Libyan people, their collective questioning conduced to the great social change.

Thus, to conclude, "it is the first responsibility of every citizen to question authority," as suggested by Benjamin Franklin but keeping it peaceful, modest and inoffensive because "too often we... enjoy the comfort of opinion without the discomfort of thought," as stated by John F Kennedy, must be our utmost attention.

Thanks for reading and appricaite any suggestion !
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jul 7, 2012   #2
At the end of the introduction you should clearly mention your opinion; Agree or disagree. Then state the reasons why you agree or disagree with the statement. This part of the introduction is called Blueprint which shows what issues are going to be argued in the essay and , in fact, it is an outline of the body.

they have to focus foron larger areas

First, government authorities are bigger in scale and often complex in composition compared to individual or community.

What is the relationship between this paragraph and the topic?

Add a summary at the end of each paragraph.

Such partialities are attributed to unequal dissemination of services

Regards
Ahmad
joshuanderitu01 2 / 41  
Jul 7, 2012   #3
deepakbaniya
this might prohibit the institutions from focusing on small ]problems of any particular area,which could be "huge"for the residence

i think if you use this word huge without the hiphenation sign it would sound well in your essay because the meaning is the same,

but i am not saying its wrong its alright as long as it means something to the reader,as well you can give a few examples where you say

small problems of any particular area, which could be "huge" for the residents .I still say your essay is correct and well written
OP deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 7, 2012   #4
Doesn't the first paragraph say I am Agreeing? what do you think?

(This aberration is still relevant and practicable today, ... In other words, peoples supporting good ideas of authorities and rejecting or helping to amend unfruitful agendas are conducive to ideal society.

I do not think I have to write the word "I agree..." to agree with the statement.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jul 7, 2012   #5
This aberration is still relevant and practicable today, ... In other words, peoples supporting good ideas of authorities and rejecting or helping to amend unfruitful agendas are conducive to ideal society.

It would be better to write "in my opinion", "From my perspective" and the like, to show this is your opinion. I did not get that this is your idea. U should write your opinion clearly

In addition, you should mention the reasons of the position that u have taken.
OP deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 7, 2012   #6
1. This aberration is still relevant and practicable today.
2. In my opinion ( I agree), This aberration is still relevant and practicable today.
You mean second sentence is right here.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jul 7, 2012   #7
You mean second sentence is right here.

Yes, this is better than the first one. In this way a reader can easily get your opinion and he/she does not need to analyze the sentences to understand your idea.
OP deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 7, 2012   #8
Thanx Ahmad and joshuanderitu01 for valuable suggestions.
Joshua, I agree with you . The word "huge" without ".. " looks better.
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jul 10, 2012   #9
despite the wide agreement that authority; refers to the government institutions in this essay; havehas (this refers to "authority") an obvious intent ofon fostering society's well-being

Your introduction is great, but there is a problem in the organization of it. You started the introduction with a good motivator/general background. After that, u should rewrite the topic (thesis statement) and then give your opinion. In fact, the main idea of the topic is that "Can the questioning authority improve a society in various facets?". U wrote this point at the end of the introduction. In my opinion it would be better to write the different parts of the introduction in the order that I wrote below:

1) Motivator; 2) Thesis statement(What is the main idea of the essay); 3) your opinion; 4) Blueprint

Opponents of this idea argue that questioning the authority might jeopardize sensitive issues like religious harmony, foster rebellion and create chaos and unrest

How will the questioning authority jeopardize such issues that u stated above? U did not support this statement.

Whether it is Dr Martin Luther King; Mahatma Gandhi; or Libyan people, their collective questioning conduced to the great social change.

U tried to support your words by a quotation from Gandhi, but it is not clear. What type of change do you mean? Make it apparent.

Good job

Hope the comments be useful
Ahmad
OP deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 11, 2012   #10
Hope the comments be useful Ahmad

Thank you Ahmad for the suggestion!
You have valid points. I will work on your points.
supercool 1 / 4  
Jul 24, 2012   #11
wow great essay!!!!
can you give me some suggestions on writing..
I have many ideas but I am poor at expressing them and
it gets harder with time limit
Thanks!!


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