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[IELTS Practice] My attempt on Creative Artists


biangbiang 2 / 4  
May 4, 2011   #1
Question: Creative artists should be given freedom to express their ideas (words, pictures, music and films. However some people think government should take some restriction with them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give your reasons with own knowledge and give examples.

My answer:

Innovative artists bring enjoyment and inspiration to our sometimes tedious life; however, some people deem that artists have been entrusted with too much freedom and power and should be restricted by the government. It is my personal belief that freedom of expressing thoughts and ideas should always be eulogized and it's rather iniquitous to impose a shackle on artists' will to create.

One of the major concerns against freeing artists' creation derives from the fear of social misleading which would destabilize the society; however, I believe the audiences have their own judgement and are not likely to be misled or influenced by some art work. It is needless to say that art inevitably involves imagination, exaggeration and sometimes is purely fabricated; regardless of whether the work of art is based on truth or not, it is the public's authority to determine how to interpret its meaning. If the art displays unreality, the public audiences certainly have the acumen to recognise its untruthfulness and only appreciate its art value; if the art reflects the reality, then what would be the intention to ban it if it was not for covering the dirty truth? Would it be autocratic if the government clamp down the artists who are telling the truth? In a word, the notion of being afraid of social misleading is unjustified.

Let's then take a look at the impact that art has posed on individuals. It is undeniable that some of the art work may contain negative implications such as insanity, violence, eroticism etc. I absolutely agree that restrictions on exposure to adolescents should apply as adolescents are not mature enough to avoid being led astray by these contents; however, in the case of adults being the audience, there's really nothing to hide - these negative things objectively exist on this planet and it is impossible for adults to be brain-washed only because of some pieces of creative art.

By way of conclusion, I do not root for the idea that restrictions should be put on artists work; on the contrary, they should be encouraged to express their innovative ideas - this world needs them to make itself colourful.

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mroho 1 / 2  
May 5, 2011   #2
just my 2 cent:

Generally there is much type of artist, singer, actor, author, painter, etc. as artist, they can express their ideas and also themself in much kind of forms, like songs, poetries, dances, etc. when the government take some restriction with them, it could be hard for the artist.

Firstly, artist is a profession that normally incomparable with a scientist or a doctor. The people who want to be an artist don't have to study in a university; even universities offer a subject or major in art. Art is abstract, not science. Artist can perform better and better through experiences and practices, not just read from books. They don't also do research, like scientists. A perform from an artist is usually hard to compare to another one. It just like two different ways.

Secondly, restrictions in art could affect the performances, because normally artists work without limit. We can't also say which are good or bad. There is no accurate parameter to grade an artistic performance. Artist "speak" usually through their art. For dancer or maybe painter, it is important that they can opine their idea through their performance.

In conclusion I believe there is no way to take some restriction with them, because artists always discover a way to express themselves. We couldn't also give restriction just in an art genre, because it come always new genre. What we could do is, we should give some regulation, so art can't endanger us.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 6, 2011   #3
I think the word posed can be omitted.

Also, I think this part will be better with a small change, like this: One of the major concerns against freeing artists' creation is derived from the fear of ...

artists always discover a way to express themselves.

Good point, Cornelius! I agree with your idea...

Xin, you forgot one apostrophe: be put on artists' work; on the contrary, they should be encouraged to express their innovative ideas. This world needs them to make itself colourful. -----Also, I think the ending will be more poignant as a separate, short sentence as I made it above.

Anyway, this essay is some impressive writing! To perfect your skill, read Strunk and White's Elements of Style. Great, great job.
OP biangbiang 2 / 4  
May 9, 2011   #4
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