Grade this GRE issue essay task out of 6.. feel free to point out any mistake

I am appearing for GRE next week.I have no idea whether the essays I am writing will get me.So please help me grading this essay out of 6 by GRE standards.Please be honest in evaluating if you think this is a very poor work. If I can manage at least 3,I will be happy.

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

I totally agree with the author on this aspect..Man can form a habit in 3 ways.
1. It is rooted in him by dint of genetic inheritance.
2.He derives the habit in his childhood imitating his parents.
3.He forms the habit himself by conscious effort.
Generally the first two are integral part of our growing up and hence,they are responsible for our behavioral patterns . Obviously,they are out of reach of our manipulations.

Behavioral trait is an autosomal trait that is carried by genes.Obviously the genetic heritage is pre-dominant in an individual's demeanours.If we look around we will see that children exhibit stubbornness or placidity in a similar fashion as their parents or close relatives do.

If we look back at history,we will not have to search very far for examples.Rahul Gandhi,politician of Indian Gandhi family exemplifies mildness and calmness just like his mother Sonia Gandhi.

If the largest part of our behavioral habits are predetermine in the mother's womb most of the rest are also consequences of our passive learning of our parents' mannerisms and decorums.Most of our habits are nipped in our childhood .In that time, we inadvertently imitate our parents and slowly acquire their behavioral traits. As a child is quick to absorb he will imbibe his parents' good or bad characteristics.This is the reason behind the filial transfer of moral values also.

Since the game of genetics is not to be played by as and we can not determine our parents' behavior we have to accept the way we are sculpted once we reach adulthood. Surely,we can try to change behavioral habits and we may succeed but that is a different story altogether.Man can change habits by their own endeavors but the making of their habits is mostly determined by the caprice of his fate.

Can I ask a question to MOD's, why I cannot create a thread without posting a message into two threads?

I'm not a moderator, so I'll reserve comment.

As for THIS paper, it's a three.

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I agree with this policy..Proofreading eventually helps develop your skills and grammar...

This can be true.

However, if I don't know my multiplication tables, should I be teaching arithmetic (let alone real math)?