Here are my thoughts:
"Trying to "do better than" others is natural to every person. It is
programmed in our genes to try to outdo people around us at least in something; knowing
that we are better than somebody usually gives us some kind of satisfaction. Even the people who claim that they are equal to everybody else (Remove comma)
by saying that they present their selves as just to others, which obviously makes them feel like they are doing better than people who do not care about others. But the interpretation of "do better" can vary from person to person. For some it can be by achieving high social status or by knowledge they have in a particular subject or performing
some action better than people around. Some diverse and unusual points
can be found in the
"Republic" by Plato on this subject.In Book
I of The Republic Thrasymachus declares "A person of great power outdoes everyone else" (Citation needed.)
by this statement he presents the phenomena of pleonexia, "the insatiable desire to have what rightfully belongs to others" Citation needed.
as a natural state, where justice is an obstacle. Thrasymachus argues that being completely unjust is what will make you happy and not being just, because if you are completely unjust you will appropriate
what you want by force or by slyness no matter if it belongs to someone, and no matter who the person it belongs to is your relative, your friend or someone you do not
know. Unjust men try to "outdo" or "overreach" others;
they try to have more than what is supposed to be theirs. Socrates says "A just person doesn't outdo someone like himself , whereas the unjust person outdoes both like and unlike" (Citation and end punctuation needed.)
In my opinion a
just person does not need to outdo another
person in any way, from the moral side a
just person is already above unjust one, only because he/she is just and from the material side a just person would never want to have what the unjust one has because all of what the unjust person has is whether stolen or taken by force. I
t would be contradictive to a definition of a just person the desire to have things that belong to somebody else. Would not be a just person be happier with little gained
by truthful means, then with a lot but gained by force?
In Book II Glaucon argues that those who practice justice do it unwillingly , and if they are granted the freedom to do whatever they wish for we'll see the just person doing the same things as the unjust person. "The reason
for this is the desire to outdo others and get more and more" explains
Glaucon (Citation needed)
. Then he gives us an example of the ring of Gyges to support his explanation.
According to the article Rich Man's Burden in the
New York Times nowadays "the rich are the most stressed out and the most likely to be working the most (Citation and end punctuation needed.)
" In today's world people are in a constant race for money. This makes the our world totally different from the world of Plato. In ancient Greece rich men had everything done for them ; while
also have people working at their homes, the
pace of life
is much faster. While before you had to wait a few month before you would receive an answer from your business partner in another village, now you will probably receive it within an hour. Now we have to make decisions
everyday and sometimes the faster you are the better you will do. "W
omen with higher income report feeling more stressed than women with lower incomes" Where is this from? Citation needed.) Which means
more money you have, the more you work (The more you work or the more pressure you are under?)
. A concept
that for ancient Greeks would be something ridiculous."
You really need to make sure that you are citing any and all statements in your work that are not 100% your original words. There are some mechanical and punctuation errors, and your conclusion is weak. I'm not really sure if that is the end of your essay or not, but if it is, it should be a paraphrase of the entire text, not just your last main idea.