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Pets are part of family? Yes ; IELTS


bahareh 18 / 50  
May 15, 2011   #1
People mostly have a pet at home, and it is one of their most desires. They are looking to raise their pets as their children and keep them safe as much as they can. I believe that pet should be treated as a family member because pets bring many benefits for people who love them. Pets bring many happiness and fun to the family, help disable people do their work, and teach the children the sense of responsibility.

First, people always feel happy and excited while they are playing with their pets. For instance, after a long work day, people need to get rest; and there is no funnier thing than playing with a dog. Children play with their pets like their dogs and get busy which is so please for their parents.

Besides, pets help disable people do their work. There are many trained dogs that help blind people to get their direction or other needs. For example, my friend has problem with her vision and cannot to go outside without any accompany. She's got her new pet, a brilliant dog that helps her through daily life.

Moreover, pets have effective impact on the children's response to their parents or their sibling. Having a pet at home contributes children to learn the sense of responsibility. Children know how to care of their sibling because they are good caregiver for their pets.

All in all, any family can find many beneficial related to having pets at home. They care about their pets like their family members, so they feel happy and never lonely. In addition, life would be easier for people with disability if they find their favorite trained pets.
isai 12 / 111  
May 16, 2011   #2
Greetings !

The essay attempts to address the question, but may not be focused and/or contains some significant factual or conceptual errors, indicating insufficient understanding to merit a pass. There may be major omissions.

There may be a failure to address the question as asked but the essay does show some understanding of the topic or the question is addressed, at least in part, but there are serious errors and/or omissions that indicate poor understanding.

The essay shows a clear lack of understanding with major errors and omissions. There is little attempt to address the question.

No serious attempt has been made to answer the question asked.

Regards
lovelysmile 4 / 3  
May 16, 2011   #3
People mostly have a pet at home, and it is one of their most desires. They are looking to raise their pets as their children and keep them safe as much as they can. I believe that pet should be treated as a family member because pets bring many benefits for people who love them. Pets bringmany happiness and fun to the family, help disable people do their work, and teach the children the sense of responsibility.

First, people alwaysusually feel happy and excited while they are playing with their pets. For instance, after a long work day, people need to get rest; and there is no funnier thing than playing with a dog. Children play with their pets like their dogs and get busy which is so please for their parents.

Besides, pets help disable people do their work. There are many trained dogs that help blind people to get their direction or other needs. For example, my friend has a problem with her vision and cannot to go outside without any accompany. She's got hera new pet, a brilliant dog that helps her through daily life.

Moreover, pets have effectivepositive impact on the children's response to their parents or their sibling. Having a pet at home contributes children to learn the sense of responsibility. Children know how to care of their sibling because they are good caregiver for their pets.

All in all, any familyies can find many beneficial related to having pets at home. They care about their pets like their family members, so they feel happy and never lonely . In addition, life would be easier for people with disability if they find their favorite trained pets.

your essay isn't good. those ideas are not interesting. moreover, you use some wrong word, please check collocation before writing and pay attention to article( a ,an, the) and plural noun.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
May 16, 2011   #4
People often keep a pet at home, and for pet lovers this practice fulfills one of their most heartfelt desires. ----I fixed up this first sentence. Practice typing it this way, and tell me if you have any questions about it.

use a d to talk about disabled people:
disabled people..

I see a place where you tried to use the word PLEASING:
Children play with their pets, especially dogs, and keep busy, which is so pleasing for their parents.

If you use CONTRIBUTES, you should make it a contribution to something... like an EFFORT:
Having a pet at home contributes the effort to teach children to have a sense of responsibility.

Children know how to care of their siblings because they are good caregivers for their pets.

:-)
OP bahareh 18 / 50  
May 18, 2011   #5
Thankyou Kevin. I got your idea about my first sentence and it was right.I should not translate my own language into English,I should think in Enlglish way.

bahareh


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