Emax3 1 / - Aug 22, 2013 #1It was truly an alluring sight that I would always remember. His intense azure eyes met mine for the first time. Goosebumps came rushing in like raindrops unnecessarily with no purpose. I couldn't look away it was as if I was trapped by those lightening blue-sea eyes.I could feel my body become surprisingly hot, too hot. My fingers were itching for something, something strange . Suddenly, the spell broke. He stumbled back with a startling look as if He was the the only one affected. Whilst I on the other hand froze. Yes froze like an idiot.Yet my sultry eyes still had the time to unclothe him. Don't blame me I couldn't control my gaze. He was a very tall, muscular man with broad shoulders. Uncontrollably attractive man with no hardship when it comes to women. He had a structured, little bit crooked nose probably due to fights and a playful ,secret smile as if he knows something that we don't. Mysterious aura surrounded him. Certainly, he was my perfect dream man.----------------------------------------------------------------- ----------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------So would you think? I'm 14 years old by the way...Is it good? Or rubbish? Thanks xxxx :)P.S-Random writing just started this idea now :) xx
Minions144 2 / 4 Aug 22, 2013 #2Your writing is free and soaring. It has feeling which touches me.Although I am not native, just being an English learner and be familiar with English testing and formal essay, your essay touches my heart.Keep writing.