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People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons people work.


winchesters 3 / 9  
Sep 9, 2011   #1
toefl topic. People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons people work. Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.

Most people work because they need money. I believe there are also some other reasons about why people work. People want to keep them busy because it is a way to keep away thoughts about tragedies or sorrows of life. Some people enjoy the routine and prestige of their work.

Some people work to deal with their problems, for example they are not happy with their lives or they have lost some love one. They find solace or comfort in working. Otherwise if they don't work then it is very painful to think about past or tragedies of life. One best way to get rid of such thoughts is to keep oneself busy in work.

Some people are very agile, active who can't stand staying at home and do nothing. They think that without work life is meaningless, and dormant. They like the routine of getting up early in the morning and get to the work. On work they meet their friends and other employees, and they like their company. They have something to talk about when they meet their relatives. They talk about their work, and those who work in multinational companies can brag about their work in social get together.

It is in instincts of some people to feel happy by accomplishing some task through their work. They enjoy the prestige of being able to do something unique in their jobs. For instance, an architect engineer works day and night on a structure and tries to bring in some unique idea. If he succeeds in designing a flamboyant building or resort that attracts tourists from all over the world, then nothing will compares the happiness and satisfaction he feels.

In our society most people work for money, however, some people find working a best solution to get over the tragedies of life. Some people savor their work, and like their job routine, and some people relish the prestige of their work.
jamliu0229 9 / 24  
Sep 9, 2011   #2
Some people work to deal with their problems, for example they are not happy with their lives or they have lost some love one.

Some people work endlessly in order to deal with their problems, for example they are not happy with their lives or they have lost love from someone .

Otherwise if they don't work then it is very painful to think about past or tragedies of life. One best way to get rid of such thoughts is to keep oneself busy in work.

Otherwise if they did not work, it would be very painful to think about past or tragedies of life. One best way to get rid of such thoughts is to keep oneself be busy in working .

Some people are very agile, active who can't stand staying at home and do nothing.

Some people are very agile and active who can't stand staying at home or doing nothing.

They think that without work life is meaningless, and dormant.

They think that life without work is meaningless and dormant.

They talk about their work, and those who work in multinational companies can brag about their work in social get together

They talk about their work, and those who work in multinational companies can brag about their work in social when they get together

In our society most people work for money, however, some people find working a best solution to get over the tragedies of life.

In our society, most people work for money, however, some people find that working isone of the best solution to get over the tragedies of life.
OP winchesters 3 / 9  
Sep 9, 2011   #3
thank u very much...it helped alot. as for as conditional sentences are concerned i guess i can use present form for conditions that are likely to occur...like if they don't work it is( or will) painful to deal with it.
BarbieTsu 2 / 4  
Sep 9, 2011   #4
to bring in some unique ideas .

It is good essay but so dry. I think you should use transitions to make it more professional. For example: Some people are very agile, active who can't stand staying at home and do nothing. Therefore they think that without work life is meaningless, and dormant.

Good luck :D
OP winchesters 3 / 9  
Sep 9, 2011   #5
yup u r right....i m not satisfied with my writhing skills,though i m going to write toefl on 18th of this month and just few days to go...i will try to make it.


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