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Are parents the best teachers? they play a dominant role


nastaran1990 3 / 6 2  
Dec 9, 2012   #1
In fact there are usually some conflicts between parents and their young children because they have different or even opposite ideas,thoughts and interests; However, from my perspective , parents definitely play a dominant role in their children's life. Since they are the only persons who has brought them with difficulty,care and kindness.

To begin with, parents are the first persons a child will see in his or her life. Children grow in their family and learn several things from their parents. Parents are those who teach their little child several basic skills such as learning to walk,talk,eat and so on. In addition to these skills, they fullfil their demands in the best way. Obviously a good teacher is the one who gratifys all of your fundemental needs. Therefor parents are truely the childrens best teachers.

Alternatively, children spend their early years of life time in a same house with their parents. In some countries children live with their parents untill they are 18; However, in other countries,like my country, they live with their family until they get married, so it is evident that their parents can profoundly influence them. Children will surely learn a lot from their parents' experiences. They benefit from a mother who fosters them and teach them moral lessons and a father who help them to be strong. These lessons are the chief lessons that anyone can ever learn.

Finally, parents deeply love their children. They are always ready to sacrifice their time,money even their life, to their children; hence, they will always help their children in critical situations by advising them and teaching them lessons,which no teacher can ever teach.

All in all, as far as I'm concerned, parents are the greatest teachers, who are always next to their children ,ready to give them whatever they want. For this reason it is really shameful for those young people who treat their parents rudely. Every one should respect their parents and honour them as if they are the only precious thing they have.

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dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 9, 2012   #2
Since they are the only persons who has have brought them up with difficulty,care and kindness.

person has / persons have
It should be ''brought up'' (past tense) or ''bring up'' (present tense) which means raising or upbringing. However, I like if you say this in present tense.

Also the way you express your opinion is a bit weak. It does not sound as if you are convinced that parents are the best teachers. Say it direct and clear;


However, in my belief, parents are the best teachers for their children. They are the ones who play a dominant role in the lives of their children and go through all hardships in bringing them up. Parents guide their children in the right path with endless love and care that nobody else could replace the role of parents.
OP nastaran1990 3 / 6 2  
Dec 9, 2012   #3
Thank you
But, why didn't my statement sound convincing?? could you please explain more?
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 9, 2012   #4
Hi,

But, why didn't my statement sound convincing?? could you please explain more?

Well... what you say is that ''parents definitely play a dominant role in their children's life". This fails to give a direct message that "parents are the best teachers". Playing a dominant role does not have to include teaching necessarily. A child can be left with no teaching at all during his life time. Having a dominant presence in child's life is therefore does not directly convey anything about teaching. However, you prompt is about teaching a child.


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