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Overpopulation causes and solutions



akariThreads: 4
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Author: Anh Ngoc Nguyen Thi
   
Jan 8, 2012, 08:08am   #1
After about two centuries, human population has increased like never before. According to a report of the United Nations, namely "2010 Revision of the world population prospects", the world population has reached about 7 billion people in 2011 with the average annual growth rate at around 1.1 per cent.
There are numerous contributors explaining this serious problem, both subjective and objectives ones. It is first argued that as a result of better living standards, the advancement in technology and discovery of treatments for many diseases that used to be the culprits of a large number of deaths such as malaria and measles, people can be no longer susceptible to common diseases and live longer than ever. Secondly, as the wars happen much less compared to the past, there has been a steep decline in deaths and humanity is on its way to endless prosperity. Furthermore, despite having already several daughters, a host of families endeavour to give birth to a boy who can inherit legacy and carry on the family name and lineage due to the mindset prioritizing males over females, especially in less developed countries. Finally, unwanted pregnancy which also contributes to overpopulation is on account of the lack of knowledge about sexual relations and contraception/ birth control.
What can be done in order to solve this serious worldwide problem? One obvious measure is to give the problem a higher profile in the media so that the public become more aware. Simultaneously, the equality between men and women should be raised intensively all over the world so as to wipe out the ideology of male supremacy. One possibility is to have up to two children per couple and governments can help by implementing strict penalties on having more two children. This solution has been significantly successful in many countries with the purpose of reduction in birth rate. The intensive promulgation of education progammes in schools and remote areas ought to be organised with the purpose of decreasing unwanted pregnancy. Education can be the most effective measure to deal with this problem, but it requires more concerted efforts among citizens and government themselves. Moreover, it is good idea is to support poor countries with the funding of contraceptive provision and education programmes.
As suggested above, a series of subjective and objective reasons can be the culprits of overpopulation. Government, international bodies and citizens are all responsible for solutions of this serious phenomenon with educational measure being the most efficacious way.
Please correct this essay for me, thank you so much!



thatgirl12Threads: 2
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Author: Jesse Love
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Jan 10, 2012, 06:39pm   #2
I think you're awesome for seeing this! You have a true passion for our world and it really shows!!


akariThreads: 4
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Author: Anh Ngoc Nguyen Thi
   
Jan 11, 2012, 11:07am   #3
Thank you. If there are any mistakes, please tell me how to correct them:)


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Author: Andres
   
Jan 11, 2012, 07:07pm   #4
I would change the beggining from: After about two centuries, human population has increased like never before

to: In the previous two years, the human population has suffered a never seen before increase on its number.

Here: strict penalties on having more two children

There you missed a word, it would be like this: strict penalties on having more than two children

Here: as the wars happen much less compared to the past

I would use: as fewer wars take place in comparison to the past

Here: One possibility is to have up to two children per couple and governments can help by implementing strict penalties on having more two children

I would use: One possibility is to permit the families to be able to have up to two children, and implement strict penalties from the goverment over the families that fail to meet the expectations.

These are just thoughts, I think these corrections would make your essay look more "elaborated", like if it was a legal paper.

Hope it helped!


akariThreads: 4
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Author: Anh Ngoc Nguyen Thi
   
Jan 12, 2012, 11:02am   #5
Thank you very much:)




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