with our beloved families
which destroys valuable lives and, therefore,as well as our future.
In order to elaborate on the second paragraph I think you can write about the causes that affect our attitudes toward weekends. U talked about drugs and unhealthy activities. So, why do some people choose these types of activities? If you talk about the roots of these problems you can make your essay more attractive.we are educatedlear how to be organised in order to avoid
Add more detail to this part. How do we learn that? Who teach us? Dose media play a role?
Here are some relevant tips on how one can manage their weekend proficiently.
"Here are" is a little informal. U can write the sentence in this way (just a suggestion):"There are several ways that may help us to use our spare times effectively."This will allow us to have a better arrangement of activities without missing others as well.
Add an example here.
Be sure to allocate plenty of time for revision as well as some fun and enjoyment to relax ourselves,
write about the effect of relaxation on our mental state and other positive aspects of that.
I think you should connect the forth paragraph to the previous ones. I, as a reader, could not understand why you were talking about yourself. In the second paragraph you talked about some unhealthy activities and in the third one you suggested some ways for spending free time. I think you should work on the cohesion of the essay and try to connect different parts of the essay to each other.