The genuie meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply be defined as the accomplishments that a person as acheieved in life or the opposite of failure to be precise.This makes it a misbelieve that being successful solely depend on earning a lot of money.
Firstly,lets take a look at the very wealthy hollywood stars and musicians,they make so much money but are always invovle in one sandal or the other...
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The genuine meaning of success is complex and individuals define it to suit their personal achievements. Success can simply be defined as the accomplishments that a person has achieved in life, or the opposite of failure to be precise.This makes it a misbelievecontradicts the belief that being successful solely dependdepends solely on earning a lot of money.
Firstly , lets take a look at the very wealthy hH ollywood stars and musicians.T hey make so much money, but are always invovleinvolved in one sandalscandal or the otheranother, like drug addiction, suicide, assault, and so on. WillWould they be considered a good example of successful personspeople ? Definitely not[ though making large amount of money is the password] (I don't quite understand the necessity of this phrase or what you're getting at) .[ Many make less money but they achieve their set goals and that is considered success.] (This seems like a sentence that belongs in your next paragraph)
Secondly , success can not be defined in relation to money.It deals more with the ability to live a life that is worth living and makes you to be happy. For example, my parents always consider themselves as being successful al[ though they are mediocre(perhaps "middle-classed" is the word you're looking to use?) . but theWhat little they earned was made so useful. The whole children were sent to school from this little payused to send all four of their children to school.T hey are proud to have a doctor son and a civi l engineer, while the other two are still in the university studying nursing and accountancy. Thinking about us gives them great joy and they always say it that they are the most successful people in the world.
In conclusion, true success has a lot more with happiness than with money and not only individuals that earn a lot are successful.
On the whole, I like your essay, it was very solid and the points you brought up were simple yet effective in making your point. Minor suggestion that maybe you take the last sentence of your second paragraph and make it the topic sentence of your third because it seems more befitting than what you originally have there. Also, you might want to make your thesis clearer and expand your conclusion which seems a little short.
