In this materialistic world only people who earn a lot of money are considered succesful

In this meterialistic world it is generally agreed that only people who earn a lot of money are successful.But to be frank I cannot agree with this statement. There are numerous reasons why I have no confidence with this and I would explore a few here. As a matter of fact in todays world most of the people believe that to be a successful human they need to have money with them. However, in my point of view money and success are two different things where having money will not lead to be a successful human and being a successful human will not lead to gain a lot of money.

First of all there are people whom we consider to be rich and whom are having luxurious lives. When we investigate futhur it seems that they earn money via gambling, prostitution, drug dealing like unpleasent acts. Therefore, even though they seems to be happy they pretend themselves to be. They neither happy nor succeeded in life. So, this conveys that money does not lead to success.

On the other hand there are successful people such as teachers etc. who shapes the lives of future generation and provide them education. Most of them do not have luxurious lives as they do not have lot of money. In contrast to that they have the self satisfation and self respect from the society. In my opinion they are the most successful people. They truly feel happy on what they have.

In addition to these also there are another category who have acheived both money and success at the same time. For an example, IT engineers for an example Mark zuckerberg the owner of the world most famous social network, face book is holding the first place of the world's most richest list. He is a person who have earned money through his knowledge and hard working. So at a very small age he has being able to succeed and gain lot of money.

So that the most satisfactory conclusion is that can come to is that money and success are two different things where success can lead to gain money but money will never create a successful person.

Frankly, it was quite OK but you have to mind your punctuation and grammar. Gather the right facts!!! Zuckerberg isn't the richest...

Thank you very much

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meterialistic ...materialistic ;)