Taking a gap year off between high school and university has become a popular option among many young people. This time provides a break after many years of formal study. Some people prefer to travel around the world and others would rather work during the a yea
In an introduction u should mention that the essay is going to talk about what. U should add a sentence to show the essay is about the advantages and disadvantages of the issue.
n addition, working in the early life
There is no coherency between this sentence and previous ones. Before this u were talking about the advantages of traveling, u should add a sentence to connect "traveling" to "working". For example, :"Working is another choice that many young people try to experience it before studying a subject at a university." Then talk about the advantages of working. )
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From my point of view, it would influence to youngers adversely and their future if they choose working and traveling instead of studying.
Why? you should support your opinion.
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Ahmad