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IELTS; Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.


Girishgautams 2 / 5  
Dec 8, 2013   #1
hi all, i am preparing for ielts please help me to improve my writing.
topic- Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

In the modern era, as we are developing , our daily needs are also increasing rapidly. Everything we noun a certain packaging that will produce more rubbish. I think it is true in almost every country , each household and family produces large amount of rubbish every week. Their are many other factors which contributes towards the high production of rubbish.

Firstly, In many countries like india and china has a large population. Large population means increase in demands of goods, its means more rubbish. In addition to,in these countries peoples are not aware with the harmful affects of rubbish and how it can disbalance our environment. Furthermore, our industries also been a main reason for producing large amount of rubbish. There are no specific guidelines for industries, how they can recycle or dump there waste or rubbish.

In these circumstances, What should government do or can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Firstly, government can educate peoples through advertisement, newspapers and radio. So people can be aware of its harmful affect toward our environment. Secondly,By placing more and more rubbish bins in the public areas, government can reduce rubbish. To control the industrial waste, government can increase the tax on them and set a guidelines for them which are need to be follow strictly by them. Nevertheless, government can build more recycle plants to reduce waste and can be used again.

In conclusion, this is the time to take a stand, as we all are under the global warming. We have seen many disastrous incident around the world. In my opinion, Before it is too late for us it is better we work together as a family to save our earth.
mariali 3 / 9 1  
Dec 8, 2013   #2
Firstly, In many countries like india and china has a large population.

I think you should not start with "firstly" "secondly" etc... in the beginning of a paragraph. You could do it better with a topic sentence which presents your general idea in that paragraph before you show examples.

What should government do or can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Firstly, government can educate peoples through advertisement, newspapers and radio. So people can be aware of its harmful affect toward our environment. Secondly,By placing more and more rubbish bins in the public areas, government can reduce rubbish.

As I said, be careful when using adverb like those in bold form and capital letter, don't do it disorderly.
You could start with "The main point is,...", "In general / Grenerally...", "My first view is...", "One hand,... In the other hand,..."... or many other words or idioms. Be more flexible in using words :)
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Dec 8, 2013   #3
Good introduction :)

Firstly, In many countries like india and china has a large population

India and China have / India or China has
Also, this sentence is not so meaningful. India and China are exceptions compared to other countries in terms of population. They together hold % of world's entire population.

First tell the reason and then support it with this example;
First, as the population grows at a faster pace, it increases the amount of rubbish getting produced too. For example, China and India, being the two countries having the largest populations in the world, have a reputation being highly polluted countries.
FrankZheng 3 / 14 7  
Dec 9, 2013   #4
Another suggestion for you, avoiding meaningless sentences and repeating the question.
For example,
1) Their are many other factors which contributes towards the high production of rubbish. In introduction paragraph, this is pointless.
2) What should government do or can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
OP Girishgautams 2 / 5  
Dec 10, 2013   #5
Thanks a lot for helping me guys. It's really very helpful for me. Someone can please also help me with the conclusion for this eassy. Thanks a lot again


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