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(Nodame Cantabile) - My movie presentation exercise

doris leeThreads: 1 Posts: 3 Author: doris lee chin chin	Oct 8, 2011, 05:20am #1
This is my first essay. Hope all of you give me your comment. I'm extremely grateful to you. Nodame Cantabile This movie comes from Japan. This is a love story in music school in Japan. The chief actor's name is Qian Qiu. He is an outstanding student in music school. He dreams of becoming an instructor one day. But he is scared to fly in a plane. He is a "speak-less" man. So nobody knows about his problem and confuses that why he doesn't go overseas to study. The actress' name is Noemi. She is learning to play piano in music school. But she is a weak student and doesn't always pass the exam. She dreams of becoming a kindergarten music teacher one day. Because she feels that it will be a very happy job. She likes children. She plays piano in her own style and doesn't follow the rule and she just plays for interest and joy. She is a optimistic girl. The story of movie is around symphonic concert. Noemi likes Qian Qiu. He is scared to fly in a plane. So that, she helps him to overcome his problem and lets him go overseas to study the instructor course and makes his dream become true. Qian Qiu is much moved by her help and likes her little by little. Noemi is scared that she can't follow Qian Qiu to go overseas. Because they are in different level. Noemi works hard to pass the exam. Qian Qiu helps him to study. He founds that Noemi is a wizard in plying piano. When she listens to a symphonic music. She can play it but doesn't follow the rule of play. This isn't allowed in the exam. He helps her understand the rule of playing piano and explains the feeling of composing music. She learns why and how to compose the tune of music. The player will play piano in pleasant tune after he/she knows all the knowledge of composing music. In the exam , a foreign great pianist discovers Noemi is a genius. Even though she plays piano with informal way, he selects Noemi as his student and follows him to study in France so that Qian Qiu and Noemi are going to study in France together. Why do I like this movie ? Because the movie focuses on playing nice symphonic music in the concert. And it explains the composer's feeling and what they want to show. For example, the social morality and culture at that time. It lets me know about a music story. It's sensible to listen to the music in this movie. The movie is not only nice, it makes me immerse myself in the music too.

argentumThreads: 3 Posts: 13	Oct 8, 2011, 11:04pm #2
Hi Doris, I'm also an English learner, but I found some obvious mistakes that you made. there are some misspelled words, for instance: founds, plying there are some unusual sentences that sound weird because of your insufficient vocabulary or grammatical error, for example: Noemi is a wizard in plying piano She is learning to play piano in music school she is a weak student It's sensible to listen to the music in this movie I'm sorry if I'm wrong, just trying to help. :)

livelyThreads: 1 Posts: 5	Oct 9, 2011, 12:08am #3
And the girls name is Nodame, who is the main character. And that boy's name is Not Qian Qiu, his name is Chiyaki Shinchi. It has a wrong theory.

livelyThreads: 1 Posts: 5	Oct 9, 2011, 05:34pm #4
And you need more detail like What happened before They went to france, how did they meet or whatever...

doris leeThreads: 1 Posts: 3 Author: doris lee chin chin	Nov 16, 2011, 02:40am #5
Thanks you feedback for me . I will pay attention. More detail. I think it is a long story .

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