Research has shown that purchasing new items has no correlation to achieving happiness as the joy from buying something is only a fleeting moment.-------I don't think you can say "correlation to" this way. I think it should say "correlation with" instead. Also, WHAT research studies are you talking about? You cannot just say that research shows something without citing the study you are talking about. :^)
Humans' desire to have and purchase is in fact limitless and has no foreseeable limit. material things is in fact limitless.
In a nutshell, what we choose to do determines our happiness.----Do you see the small change I made? Look for the change, and you will improve your grammar! : -)
As we are venturing in the murky landscape of adulthood, the choice is ours whether we want to just go along with life or overcome every obstacle, arrow and stone that life throws at us and change it to achieve our happiness instead.-----every obstacle, stone, and arrow (use the singular nouns with the word "every")
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