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What must we do to truly understand ourselves? Difficult for people to judge themselves evenhandedly


helenalqy 9 / 6  
Oct 15, 2008   #1
What must we do to truly understand ourselves?

As an old saying goes,'It is always being difficult for people to judge themselves evenhandedly.' And I agree that many people do not have general idea what he or she is like in others' eyes. Therefore, from my perspective, to communicate with other people, discuss some common topics, or even argue about something can not only help people have truly understandings of others but also themselves.

Two characters, Elizabeth and Mr Darcy in the Pride and Prejudice, a far-reaching novel, can serve as an example. Their first interaction was on a ball where Mr Darcy refuses to dance with Elizabeth, who regarded him as a person with rude and pride personality ever since. After that, another officer, Wickham's accusations enhanced Elizabeth's prejudice about Darcy. Both of them, Elizabeth and Darcy, have the idea that the other is proud while have no idea about their own personalities. Nevertheless, as time goes by, Darcy falls in love with Elizabeth and expresses his feelings to her. He is astounded by her prejudice about him. He sends Elizabeth a letter telling everything happened between him and Wickham. Thought their communication, they learnt each other's personality, realized the damage they have made in both of their hearts and finally became couples. Darcy's pride of status is founded on social prejudice while Elizabeth's initial prejudice against him is rooted in pride of her own perception. But their true communications afterwards made both of them correct their ideas about each other's characteristic as well as their own personalities.

Another example is in the movie of Titanic. Rose was a girl with notable social status and she would be married with a business man, Carl. Though she did not love him, and was tired about the sybaritic life of upper classes, she lived against her own heart. When saved by Jack, and had conversations with him about their distinct life, Rose realized hat she did not want to be a upper class anymore. She finally acknowledged her love with Jack and decided to live with him forever. Jack's discretions prevented Rose from jumping into the ocean and also encourages Rose to be brave and act in accordance with her heart. Communication is the very way that made Rose to change and understands herself as a woman.

I agree that the meeting of two personalities is like the contact of two chemical substances and insist that communicate helps people to recognize themselves.
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Oct 16, 2008   #2
Your conclusion is awkward because it doesn't have anything to do with the rest of your essay; nowhere do you speak of chemicals in your piece, and the examples you used to illustrate your opinions are long winded and somewhat rambling. You probably have some really good points to make, but they are lost in the long winding road you take to get there.
OP helenalqy 9 / 6  
Oct 16, 2008   #3
Thank you very much for your correction.
I think I have got a great problem on my expressions.
Can you give me some advise on how to improve this weakness?
Thank you
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Oct 17, 2008   #4
What do you mean by "expressions?" Can you give me an example?
OP helenalqy 9 / 6  
Oct 20, 2008   #5
well, such as usage errors
and I don't really know how to highlight my meanings
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Oct 20, 2008   #6
In regards to usage, I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series written by Stephen Reid. You can pick any of them up cheap used, or get them from the library. I think there are six in the series now, and any of them would help you here. Also, there are numerous free guides on the internet.

In regards to highlighting your meanings, the best way to do this is to use details; the more descriptive and the more literary methods you use (metaphors, similes, personification, etc.) the more illustrious your writings will be.


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