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You must select your subordinate to train a new employee. What do you consider in choosing that person?
If I have own business and I have to choose my subordinates to train a new employees. I will choose them from many reasons and criteria. I will show you the important criteria for choosing someone for the essential task in training new hireling.
Criteria for select that person are enduringness or patience, experiences, skill in teaching, behaviors and empathy. Firstly, I will pick the people who can restrain or control their temple in high pressure situations. Sometimes teaching someone is hardness and need much more time. Secondly, the people I choose should have experience in their field at least 1-2 years. In addition, they must have good behaviors to be a good example for new employees. To be a precedent is one of the best methods in teaching people because of looking and imitating anyone is easiness. Maybe new employees have the problems, the questions and the doubts the man I choose must answer these questions in appropriate way and can explain more information clearly. Next, the skill in teaching is very important because somebody has more experiences and knowledge but cannot pass the knowledge to other people. The last criterion that I consider is empathy or the ability to imagine how another person is felling and so understand his mood. Further more, although the subordinates have all criteria, they should be trained particularly for this responsibility.
All of the criteria show in this essay, I am sure that I will select right person for this duty. However, the criteria may be different in any field of jobs. The suitable criteria are up to your business.
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I'd be happy to help you with some editing! Since it's not too long, I'll show you what changes I would make:
If I have my own business and I have to choose my subordinates to train a new employees, I will choose them from many reasons and criteria. I will show you the important criteria for choosing someone for the essential task in training a new hire.
Criteria for selecting that person are endurance or patience, experience, skill in teaching, behaviors and empathy. Firstly, I will pick the people who can restrain or control their temper in high-pressure situations. Sometimes teaching someone is hard and needs some extra time and patience. Secondly, the people I choose should have experience in their field at least 1-2 years. In addition, they must have good behaviors to be a good example for new employees.
To be a precedent is one of the best methods in teaching people because of looking and imitating anyone is easiness. - I am not sure what you are saying here; perhaps that a person with experience makes a good teacher because the others can follow her/his example?
New employees may have problems, questions and doubts; the man I choose must answer these questions in an appropriate way and can explain more information clearly. Next, teaching skills are very important because it does not help if somebody has more experiences and knowledge but cannot pass the knowledge to other people. The last criterion that I would consider is empathy or the ability to imagine how another person is feeling and so understand his mood. Furthermore, although the subordinates may have all these criteria, they should be trained particularly for this responsibility.
All of the criteria shown in this essay will help me to be sure that I will select right person for this duty. However, the criteria may be different in another field. The suitable criteria will depend on the business and its needs.
I hope this is helpful to you!
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