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Media info advantages and disadvantages: comics, books, radio, TV, film, theater



sweetheart87Threads: 11
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Author: Ilaria
   
Nov 10, 2010, 11:11am   #1
Essay:
Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. state which you consider to be the most effective.
. comics
. books
. radio
. television
. film
. theatre

Give reasons for you answer and include any relavant example from you own knoledge or experience.
Write al least 250 words.

Please help me to review and modify my below essay.
Thank you very much for your help in advance.


My essay:
There are many different types of media for communicating information about our culture or others. The most effective form of media in my point of view are fundamentally three: radio, television and films. We have to consider the advantages and disadvantages of these kinds of media.
The radio informs us about the news of the world. It is a good way of information for example for people who work everyday for a long time and use a car o general means of transport. These kinds of people generally don't have the time to watch TV news on television.
Moreover, radio is a good means of entertainment. In fact, we can listen to music or simply radio shows.
For example, every Thursday evening I listen to my friend on the communal channel radio with a program about rock music. It is nice!
Unfortunately, the radio is only voices without images. This is a disadvantage. We mustn't forget the importance of the impression of images.

TV is another important means of communication. It informs us about general news: politics, economy and society.
We are many times influenced by TV because there are many advertisements about everything and sometimes we are involuntarily obligated to watch some channels.
For example, the TV shows in Italy many times don't represent the population or their interests.
Thinking about the three channels of Mediaset that are owned by our President. The question is: Can this channel represent real life without limitations?
Moreover, we have to consider the kinds of programs such as reality. In my point of view these types of programs are not educative.

Films, instead, are great forms of art and I think that they have only advantages. Films tell us a story or event in history or simply a comedy. It is a good way to stay with our family or friends.

In conclusion, I think that the most important and the most effective kind of media is television. It should be more popular educative and informative than it currently is in Italy.



divya2010Threads: 3
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Author: tadi divya rajasri
   
Nov 10, 2010, 11:43pm   #2
the first line has to more effective.merits and demerits sounds better in essays.third line " for people who spend most of their time either working or travelling radio is the best way to stay updated."
2nd para 2 line "we are many a time."
3rd para demerits of films: films target only certain age groups at times.
all films cannot be watched with family members.
films expose a lot of aspects in life and only the correct ones should be followed.
u can do better!


sweetheart87Threads: 11
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Author: Ilaria
   
Nov 11, 2010, 03:39am   #3
thank you! :D


fznfireThreads: 1
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Author: Prajwal Niraula
   
Nov 11, 2010, 04:02am   #4
We mustn't forget can't ignore the importance of the impression of images.

It is atl east 250 words. You must provide more reasons and clarifications. It seems the essay is not developed properly and the coherence is absolutely lacking.


sweetheart87Threads: 11
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Author: Ilaria
   
Nov 11, 2010, 04:19am   #5
Does someone else have other advices?


sweetheart87Threads: 11
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Author: Ilaria
   
Nov 11, 2010, 05:20am   #6
Why is my essay ABSOLUTELY lacking??


fznfireThreads: 1
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Author: Prajwal Niraula
   
Nov 11, 2010, 09:21am   #7
Lets's look at the third paragraph.

sweetheart87:
Films, instead, are great forms of art and I think that they have only advantages. Films tell us a story or event in history or simply a comedy. It is a good way to stay with our family or friends.


There are three sentence and none of them are related.

I don't mean to be harsh but the flow of idea is fundamentally lacking. Organization is lacking. I am not a good writer myself but I still did not find your essay can be told good.

Let me try to rewrite the third paragraph......

Films, unlike television or radio, mostly have advantages. They not only entertain us, but at the same time provide wide useful information. Through the effective audio visual effect, messages for society can be disseminated effectively. [Example.............A depth analysis of movie Titanic would help its viewer not only to refreshen their mind after some dull task but also help understand the social class system in great Britain in early twentieth century............ ]

Please help with my essay


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Nov 19, 2010, 04:30pm   #8
There are many different types of media for communicating information about our culture or others. This is a 'statement of the obvious,' and no reader would consider it a sentence that could teach her/him something new. So... do not use it! :-)

The most effective forms of media in my point of view are fundamentally three: radio, television and films. We have to consider the advantages and disadvantages of these kinds of media. (add a sentence that makes an observation that is the MAIN observation fo the essay, the reason for writing the essay. Then, end the first paragraph).

Para #2:
The radio informs us about the news of the world. Again, do not tell us what we already know)


TV is another important means of communication. Instead of stating the obvious, tell some idea about television.

It informs us about general news: politics, economy and society. Make a unique observation. Do not waste any sentences telling us what we already know.

You have some great sentences! I just wanted to show you the places where you "waste" sentences by telling the reader something that is obvious.

:-) You should tell about all the advantages that they have in common, and also tell about the disadvantages they all have in common.

Do any of them have an advantage that the other two do not have?




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