Marketing assistant position - IELTS Letter check Request

Write a letter to apply for a part time job in a new international
company, you have heard about the position from someone in your neighborhood.

Dear Sir,

Let me introduce myself. My name is Mtt Romney, my purpose of writing this letter is to apply for post of marketing assistant in your company Denver Associates. My neighbor Mr. Smith is working with your company as production manager from past 2 years and through him I came to know that your company is looking for a part time marketing assistant.

I am pursing my post graduate in field of marketing from Kellogg's University of USA. As per the visa rules, I am permitted to work 20 hours a week during my study. I have 6 months of experience of marketing during my college internship in field marketing as well as internet marketing. I was associated with Sharp Network solutions in India before joining my MBA course in USA. Attached is a copy of my resume and I can also provide university reference letter from our dean and professor if required.

As per my verbal conversation with Mr. Smith, job sounds pretty much exciting to market baby products via internet and tele marketing. I am available to come for an interview or any aptitude test at your convenience. Please feel free to contact me on +61 007.

Waiting anxiously for your reply,
Mitt Romney

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Dear Sir,

Let me introduce myself. My name is Mi tt Romney, my purpose of writing this letter is to apply for post of marketing assistant in your company Denver Associates. My neighbor Mr. Smith is working with your company as a production manager for the past 2 years and it was through him that I came to know that your company is looking for a part time M arketing A ssistant.

I am pursing my post graduate in field of marketing from Kellogg's University of USA. As per the visa rules, I am permitted to work 20 hours a week during my study. I have 6 months of experience in marketing during my college internship in field marketing as well as I nternet marketing. I was associated with Sharp Network solutions in India before joining my MBA course in USA. Attached is a copy of my resume and I can also provide university reference letters from our dean and professor if required.

As per my verbal conversation with Mr. Smith, marketing baby products via xx and xx sounds very exciting to me

GOOD LUCK! :)

Is it okay to add last line...

I am available to come for an interview or any aptitude test at your convenience. Please feel free to contact me on +61 007.
Waiting anxiously for your reply,

I don't think you need to add the last sentence as it makes you sound desperate (anxious part), besides that, everything seems fine! Good luck! :)