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(love, care, family) - should pets be treated as family members



geetakaradkheleThreads: 2
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Author: geeta karadkhele
   
Feb 26, 2011, 02:51am   #1
Hi everybody,
actually before starting my essay, i would like to tell you that I am not good enough in english...so pls help me to improve...waiting for your suggestions.


From ancient times , human being have been living in groups because he is a social animal.As the development occurred, these groups were replaced by families.Earlier there were joint families, but due to industrialization and other requirements, these families are getting settled to different places and forming their nuclear family.
Though this industrialization and modern era has given all the materialistic happiness to humans , it create scarcity of most important thing for human being and that is ...love, care, affection and emotional support...what a family can give ." Need is the mother of all inventions", humans are looking at pets for all this emotional need...so I think pets should treated as a family members because they can give us all these things what a family can....love , care, support,protection.
I think if you are looking for a true love ...pets are the only source for it except your family obviously...because they never expect any thing form you except love and love only .May be their way to express it is different but you can feel that warmth in their love.
In today's fast life, when everybody is busy in their life ....pets can accompany you as a best friend, a supporter etc. they can not only be best friend of you but in many cases of physical disabilities and mentally retarded case, the help them in their regular activities..such as to give them few things, help them to cross the road etc....In fact , recently thee was an incident in newyork ,where a dog had saved his masters life , by calling an ambulance when his master had got a heart attack.
Research also proved that if you want to release your mental stress, it would be a better option to keep a pet, because their playful activities help to secrete few hormones...that causes release of stress
Family is where we can get love , care ,mental -physical support and I think pets are the storehouse of all these things...so they should be treated as your family.
niesaysiThreads: 16
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Feb 26, 2011, 06:44am   #2
From ancient times , human beings have been living in groups because hethey were a social animal.
Though this industrialization and modern era has have given all the materialistic happiness to humans, it creates scarcity of most important thing for human being and that is ...love, care, affection and emotional support...what a family can give .
" Need is the mother of all inventions".
You may end there and then start for this as another sentence...Humans are looking at pets for all this emotional need...so I think pets should treated as a family members. because they [s]can give us all these things what a family can....love , care, support,protection.[/s]I deleted because it is redundant...

As a suggestion,you'd rather not put a lot of dots.To make your essay nice, just directly write the words and minimize using of dots so that reader will read it continuously.....



In fact , recently theethere was an incident in newyorkNew York ,where a dog had saved his master's life , by calling an ambulance when his master had got a heart attack.

Nice exposition....
geetakaradkheleThreads: 2
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Author: geeta karadkhele
   
Feb 26, 2011, 07:32am   #3
thanks Jhonies , thanks for al ur suggestions.I am going to consider it next time.what about rest of the essay do u think it is right i.e. grammatically ?
vaishali1980Threads: 26
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Author: vaishali
   
Feb 26, 2011, 01:49pm   #4
Nice flow.
Your English is very good, only need more conclusion.
geetakaradkheleThreads: 2
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Author: geeta karadkhele
   
Feb 27, 2011, 02:50am   #5
thanks vaishali....for ur encouragement. I really need it very much , to boost my confidence.
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Mar 4, 2011, 05:45pm   #6
From ancient times , human beings have been living in groups because they are social animals.

Earlier there had been joint families, but due to ...

One thing has. Two or more things have...
Though this industrialization and modern era has have given all ...

the materialistic happiness to humans , it create scarcity of the most important thing for human beings, and that is support -- love, care, affection and emotional support -- which a family can give."


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