my father is nothing like the average. My father taught me to strive for the best, and anything worth having is worth working for. He has always stressed the importance of getting a good education.
In this passage you contradict yourself accidentally. In fact, the average father teaches just these lessons.
"Without an education, you have nothing." I have withheld these words with me threw all of my education.
I would hope that you have held these words in your heart through all of your education.
CAN ANYONE TELL ME WHAT I SHOULD TAKE OUT OR ADD TO THIS ESSAY. IT CAN ONLY BE 100-150 WORDS SO I CANT ADD MUCH MORE.
You can take out the whole first sentence as well as extra words in other sentences in order to tell us at least one thing that makes your father not the average father. If you can't do that, then you have to rewrite the essay to say that he is the average father and that's a very useful thing to be.