I do not fear falling, for I have hands spread to hold me before I hit the ground; I do not fear failing for there are encouraging words and bright spirits to let my dreams not die. I just believe in joining hands, working together and sharing responsibilities, joys, sorrows, victories and defeats. And of course this team work pays me off. Working together in a group is much rewarding. For me, the ability to work in group is far more the important than to do it as an independent solitary striver.
You write very impressively. I only wish you introduced the other side of the argument as well.
A group can have people involving different areas of interests and skills.
.... exactly :)
I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. If so, you need to manage this with time allocated for the task. It looks a lengthy essay for such a task. No worries if you could manage time. Also, mention the purpose (e.g. IELTS, TOEFL etc.) in the subject so that it's easy for others to comment more relevantly.
This is very good writing :)