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GRE Issue - the word thinking is tightly coupled with the word originality, which cannot be detached


bimala73 4 / 11  
Jul 22, 2011   #1
Originality does not mean thinking something that was never thought before; it means putting old ideas together in new ways."

Originality means Creativity, Out of Box Thinking, bringing new ideas and inventions, thinking from a different angle which was never thought before. I completely disagree with the definition of Originality i.e." putting old ideas in new ways". How will you find new ways of putting old ideas without discovering something completely new than the existing one?

I will cite few examples to prove my opinion.

The dictionary meaning of the word Originality says the quality or state of being original, freshness of new ideas, style or design, and the power of independent thinking or constructive imagination. An invention or style which is completely new and startled many people. So the word thinking is tightly coupled with the word originality, which cannot be detached. Let us take a look on few examples which clearly demonstrates this phenomenon.

The changes we see today or our history says are continuous and never ending and because of this now we are leading a much better life than our ancestors. In the course of time many great inventors, Scientist, artists have taken a walk in this earth. These extraordinary people with their power of imagination discovered wonderful facts of nature or something new which had never exists. Since ages people were seeing apple falling from the tree, but it had never bothered anyone to find out what is making it to fall. However Sir Isaac Newton could not stop thinking to find out the root cause of an object falling into the ground and hence force of gravity taken birth and opened path for many more important discoveries in future. Similarly it was James Watson's extraordinary thinking ability had harnessed the power of steam and discovery of steam power engine taken place or discovery of Electric bulb by Thomas Alva Edison was beautiful example of originality. Behind all these inventions and discoveries there lies an extraordinary imagination. It will be injustice to say that all these inventions are nothing new but just an extension of old ideas presented in a new way. To support this let's take the example of smart phone. When Apple invented iphone for the first time it had surprised everyone in this globe by its incredible features in such a small device because of altogether new touch and feel. Is it not something original? Can we just claim that it is just an extension of Graham Bell invention of Telephone? However the same ideas when other companies like Nokia, Samsaung, HTC etc had copied and brought their own product into the market that lacked the originality.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 23, 2011   #2
Creativity, Out of Box Thinking,

Do not capitalize these words.

I completely disagree with the definition of originality that says it is "putting old ideas in new ways." How will you find new ways of putting old ideas together without discovering something completely new? than the existing one?

... been discovered by great scientists.

When we throw an object, it falls back to the ground. This is an existing truth that everybody knows, but how...

many people had really tried to find out the reason behind it until it stroke for the first time to Sir Issac Newton by observing an apple falling from the tree? Hence, the discovery of gravitational force came...----Again, to not capitalize words unnecessarily.

We all observe birds flying in the sky, but what made birds fly was never thought by anyone other than Wright Brothers. ----This is not true!

E=mc2 theory of Energy by Einstein -----I think he came up with this theory by putting old ideas together in new ways.

At the end I would like to say that Originality not just means putting old ideas in new ways. It certainly requires thinking from a different perspective to discover the existing truth of nature and refine the old ideas with a consistent effort to discover better ones.

This is a very thoughtful essay! However, I think originality usually comes from a unique combination of existing ideas.
ghafarimahsa 15 / 41  
Jul 23, 2011   #3
Bimala,
you made nice examples to support your preference, but try to connect them directly to your desired result. Break down your sentens, and put more dots into your essay. long sentenses are like obsticles for reader. Moreover, if you read your essay again, you will actually find some unnecessary capitalized words...

Let's take a look into a few examples of all important inventions which have been discovered by great scientists ...few has negative meaning and your writing should be so powerful ;)

We all have observed birds flying in the sky, but what makes bird to fly was never thought by anyone, other than Wright Brothers.

Today is the era of smart phones, which has so much advanced cutting edge technology, but we cannot claim it that is just a copy of original idea of Graham Bell , certainly the basic concepts of telephones which was discovered by Graham Bell remain same, but in addition to that there are lots of advanced features which differentiate the new from the old one.

( advanced = cutting-edged)

At the end, I would like to say that Originality does not mean putting old ideas in new ways....

You are a very good writer, I hope the best for you
OP bimala73 4 / 11  
Jul 24, 2011   #4
Thanks Kevin. Now I am also convinced that this essay is not in good shape. I will re-shape and ask for your review again. BTW.. I am finding little bit difficulty while composing these kinds of essays, sometimes struggle to get good example and sometimes on the flow. Will you be able to suggest some books or any website, which can help me to prepare a better essay writer. your valuable feedback is highly appreciated. Thanks -Bimala

Hi Mahsa: Thanks for your suggestion. I would make necessary changes as you suggested. -Bimala
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 25, 2011   #5
Will you be able to suggest some books or any website, which can help me to prepare a better essay writer.

I think the most important suggestion is this:
Begin with a word. Then, a sentence. Let one word grow into a sentence, and let one word grow into a paragraph.

What if I ask you whether parents are the best teachers? When you hear that question, what WORD comes into your mind? What concept? Write a sentence about the CONCEPT THAT COMES TO MIND.

After you write that sentence, you might want to write a few more sentences to explain what you mean and give an example. That is how a sentence grows into a paragraph.

Always start with one word. That is how to get the essay to flow forward powerfully, focused on one great concept.

One Essay = One big idea.

:-)
OP bimala73 4 / 11  
Jul 25, 2011   #6
Thanks much Kevin. Noted your feedback.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Aug 9, 2011   #7
I like to use " " marks in this case:
The dictionary meaning of the word "originality" explains it as, "the quality or state of being original, freshness of new ideas, style or design, and the power of independent thinking or constructive imagination. An invention or style which is completely new and startled many people" (NAME OF DICTIONARY). So the word "thinking" is tightly coupled with the word "originality," and they cannot be detached. Let us take a look on few examples ..

Similarly it was James Watson's extraordinary thinking ability had harnessed the power of steam and discovery of steam power engine taken place or discovery of Electric bulb by Thomas Alva Edison--Was his middle name really Alva? I didn't know that. Anyway, you have strong examples... :-)

At the end I would like to say that originality not just mean putting old ideas in new ways. It certainly also requires thinking...---Practie this sentence. Type it many times to learn the correct grammar. Great job here, almost perfect!
OP bimala73 4 / 11  
Aug 10, 2011   #8
Thx Kevin for your feedback. Do you mean to say that I need to mention the name of the dictionary. How do you rate this writing on a scale of 1 to 5. Your valuable feedback will help me to mend my writing skill further.

Regards,
Bimala


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