The reasons of an increase in social problems involving teenagers

In many countries there has been an increase in social problems involving teenagers in recent years. Many people believe that this is due to modern lifestyles because parents spend more and more time at work and have less time to supervise their children. To what extent do you believe this is true?

There is no doubt that adolescents are increasingly involved in criminal activities. A vast majority of folks blame their working parents for this unprecedented rise in youth illegal acts as the father and mother does not spare enough time to keep an eye on their children. In my opinion, the whole family unit is responsible for this rising community matter.

Young fellows spend more time on non productive acts than their prime focus- studies They have access to smart phones with web capability. Many teenagers like to chat on social websites which expose them to criminal minded people. It is commonly reported news that teenagers with their online chat partners get involved in crimes just for the sake of adventures. Moreover, with easier access to recreational drugs, these young fellows become addictive to these drugs. They start stealing money first from home and then from others just to be able to buy more drugs.

Parents, on the other hand, work long hours so that they could buy better home and cars. Instead of spending time with their children, they prefer to work two jobs for their next luxurious vacation. They believe it is the sole responsibility of school to teach their kids on traditional as well as moral education.

I believe raising a family is a team effort. There is nothing wrong to work hard to upgrade your living standards but not at the cost of neglecting your children. Parents should allocate enough time to nurture their progeny with love and good guidance. Similarly, children should consider their studies as top priority and avoid bad company of friends.

1)A vast majority of folks blame their working parents for this unprecedented rise in youth illegal acts as the father and mother does not spare enough time to keep an eye on their children.----you used parents/ father/mother--so use it once.

2)In my opinion, the whole family unit is responsible for this rising community matter.--your view should be related to the given task in the introduction. we should not include new one.

3)first why parents are not able to focus attention / both are employed
a) to meet the demands of modern life
b) give a better standard of life to their children--schools/modern facilities
c)give richness to their social status
d) thinking that it is school responsibility
e)allowing children towards modern equipments --mobiles or Internet or TV.--due to their busy schedules
--which lead into poor care of parents on children's behavior/social contacts/ attitude towards social elements.

4) your social factors which you included in the first para

then conclusion.

sorry, if it doesn't help you.

Thank you v. much for the great suggestion. I will work on those.Good luck to you.

They have access(ed) to smart phones with web capability ( browsers).
Generally , Your essay is good, very essay to understand but you will need to include more comples structures as well as vocabs.

... very good introduction :)
Young fellowsYouth spend more time on nonun productive acts thanignoring their prime focus- studies


Parents, on the other hand, focus more on their career and work long hours in hope of enhancing the quality of living of their families.

Thank you Dumi for input.