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The ideal teacher: a missionary


celu 8 / 20  
Jul 4, 2011   #1
hi everyone,
can you read my essay and give some feedback , please?

The teacher is the person who sows not only the seeds of knowledge in his student , but also he has a influence upon their attitude toward the school, the people and the world that surround us. He has also a special influence in modeling his students, their features and their character .

That is why teacher profession demands many skills and abilities ,, and if these skills are innate , that would be ideal. Not everyone can practice this profession that demands a life surrounded by children. So, in my opinion, the person who wishes to become a good teacher should not only to want it , but to identify himself with the job. He must love children , and meet their needs. That kind of teacher should sum up the qualities not only of a teacher , but also of a psychologist and pedagogue . one of the twenty century's psychologist , J Boucher, wrote that pedagogy can be an effective art only if it back on the psychology .

I think that an innate teacher should have an innate prone to this profession ,which cannot be well done if the pleasure of doing it lacks. Another essential condition is patience , because not all the children have the ability of immediately understanding . the communicative competence is another feature of ideal teacher with innate qualities. if he has a great amount of knowledge , but he doesn't know how to transmit it , the students will be the ones who lose. He has to feel, not only the lesson ,but also the best way of transmitting this. He has to know to introduce in his lesson the esthetical dimension , that sensitizes the students , and encourage them to learn. In the other words he has to be ingenious, clever and inventive , because it is him that determine lesson success , and not lesson's structure , ( traditional or modern ). So, in order to do attractive and interesting lessons he has to be multi-tasking , and to have a good cooperation with his students, as well.

When I mention ``cooperation``, I mean not only , good teaching methods, but also a very good class management . he should intervene with respect and discreetly in different behaviour problem events , to prove tolerance and to have a appropriate working time . in my opinion a good teacher should often use humour and never sarcasm or irony. He should act in such a way that the different class events follow a continuous and clearly logic, in a relaxed atmosphere , conductive to a good learning.

On the other hand ,taking into account that each every child is unique , the teacher must be a good psychologist , and he has to know the potential of each student. He has to guide the students' efforts , to encourage them , and to work at their affective side in order to stimulate their confidence and their self esteem.

The teacher is always a missionary . he has to share with the students his vision about reality and his love for science and humanity by challenging in his students the creative spirit. He has to keep alive the fire of knowledge until the end. In that way, he is an archetype, and a model in everyday reality, a inexhaustible generator of consciousness for the new generations.
amrosca 4 / 130  
Jul 5, 2011   #2
Hei Mirele! :D

I read your essay and here are my corrections. Good luck!

TheA teacher is the person who not only sows not only the seeds of knowledge in his student, but he also he has aninfluence(1) upon their attitude toward the school, the people and the world that surround us. He has also a special influence in modeling his students, their features and their character.

That is why teacher profession(/being a good teacher; becoming a teacher)demands(/requires) many skills and abilities and if these skills arewere innate, that would be ideal.(2)

Not everyone can practice this profession that demands a life surrounded by children.(Not everyone is made to spend the rest of their life surrounded by children.)

So,I n my opinion, the person who wishes to become a good teacher should not only to want it , but tohe should identify himself with the job. He must love children and meet their needs. That kind of teacherperson should sum up the qualities of not only of a teacher, but also those of a psychologist and pedagogue.

O ne of the twenty century'scenturies' psychologists , J. Boucher, wrote that: "P edagogy can be an effective art only if it backson the psychology."

I think that an innate teacher should have an innate prone(3) to this profession, which cannot be well done if the pleasure of doing it lacksdoes not exist . Another essential condition(/capability)(4) is patience, because not all the children have the ability of immediately understanding.

T he communicative competence is another feature of the ideal teacher with innate qualities(you already mentioned that the ideal teacher has innate qualities) . I f he has a great amount of knowledge, but he doesn't know how to transmit it, the students will be the ones who will lose. [In the last phrase you have the following two sentences: "... the studentswill bethe ones1/ wholose.2/" You need to think logically here: if you use the future tense in your first sentence, then I think it's only natural to use the future in your attributive clause as well.]

He has to feel, not only the lesson,_ but also the best way of transmitting thisit(the lesson). He has to know how to introduce in his lesson the esthetical dimension, that will sensitizes the students, and encourage them to learn. In the other words, he has to be ingenious, clever and inventive(inventive and ingenious are synonyms, you don't need to mention both), because it is him thatwho will determine a lesson's success, and not lesson's structure (traditional or modern)(?) . So(/Therefore), in order to do attractive and interesting lessons(/make lessons appealing and interesting) he has to be multitasking and to havemaintain a good cooperation with his students as well.

When I mention "cooperation", I mean not only ,(why the comma here?) good teaching methods, but also a very good comprehension of class management. H e should intervene with respect and discreetly in different behaviour problemsevents to prove tolerance and to have an appropriate working time. I n my opinion, a good teacher should often use humour and never sarcasm or irony. He should act in such a way that the different class events follow according to a continuous and clearly logic(5) , in a relaxed atmosphere, conductive to a good learning. [In any adult theory this sounds good. But what you ask for is actually impossible, because we are not driven by reason, but by emotion.]

On the other hand, taking into account that each and every child is unique, the teacher must be a good psychologist and he has to know the potential of each student. He has to guide the students' efforts(/help the students at setting their goals), to encourage them and to work aton their affective side in order to stimulate their confidence and their self- esteem(confidence and self-esteem are synonyms).

The teacher is always a missionary. ["And I can promise a sunny future for the communistic republic of wherever you come from" (lol, Canada ... ok) A "missionary" is by definition a person who tries to convert others, a person who tries to make others believe the same things he believes and act according to what he says. Shouldn't a teacher be actually the one who opens our minds? Who encourages us to think for ourselves? Isn't true knowledge actually deliberate thinking and constant questioning?]

H e has to share with the students his vision about reality and his love for science and humanity with the students by challenging in his studentsthemthein creative spiritways . He has to keep alive the fire of knowledge alive until the end. In that way, he is an archetype and a model in everyday reality, an inexhaustible generator of consciousness for the new generations. [Damn ... the teacher is the one generating my consciousness? Haha! I'm screwed then. No, ma'am. A teacher is nothing but a tiny piece of the map. Inaccurate most of the time and useless the rest of it. He will usually teach you what you need to pass the exams, but not what you need to pass the bullies at your school's gate. A teacher will not care for you, he'll care for your grades, he'll care about his legally determined job. That most of the time of course.]

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(1)- A great way of figuring out whether to use "a" or "an" is by looking at the beginning of the following word. If the word should start with a vowel, then you will employ "an". There are however some exceptions to this, as in the case of "uniform". It will be "a uniform" and "an uniform". When things get tricky, it's usually good to read the words out loud.

(2)- Take a look at the if clause [schule.de/englisch/hyper/web/grammar/rules.html]. You'll see that you'll need it quite often, so it's useful to know it well.

(3)- innate(adj.) = existing in one from birth; inborn; native: innate musical talent.
(3)- prone(adj.) = having a natural inclination or tendency to something; disposed; liable: to be prone to anger.
(3)- You cannot describe an adjective.

(4)- condition(noun) = situation with respect to circumstances.

(5)- clear(adj.) = intelligible, obvious, uncomplicated.
(5)- clearly(adv.) = in a clear manner.
(5)- In this case: "clear logic" you want to describe a noun and you'll be therefore using the adjective.
OP celu 8 / 20  
Jul 5, 2011   #3
THANK YOU ANA MARIA FROM THE BOTTOM OF MY HEART. YOU HELPED ME A LOT, AND YOUR SUGGESTIONS ARE MORE THAN WELCOMED.
i'M SO HAPPY...
I WISHED IT WERE YOU TO CORRECT MY ESSAY, BECAUSE I SAW YOU ARE VERY GOOD AND PROFESSIONAL. I AM ROMANIAN TOO, AND I NEED TO PASS A VERY DIFFICULT EXAM .

THANK YOU AGAIN , THANK YOU A LOT.
amrosca 4 / 130  
Jul 5, 2011   #4
You're very much welcome! However, Kevin and Susan are the pros around here, so better wait for a second opinion.
Geez, I don't know why I read Mirele. Yes, Mirela is Romanian. But, pif! I'm not alone, that's good to know! >D

I'm glad I could help. If you have any questions, let me know! :D


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