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I agree that writing the introduction and conclusion last is a very nice idea, but for this particular assignment the teacher is making us follow a specific format: introduction, [body], conclusion.
If I do write the body first, followed by the introduction and conclusion, I'm not quite sure how I would be able to do that. The body of my essay is the story of the first personal computer, the rise of the PC, important people/milestones in PC history, and the brief story of the Silicon Valley. Basically, I'm telling a chronologically arranged story starting from Ed Robert's Altair until the release of Windows 95.
In my introductory paragraph, or right before that, the teacher says that it's a good idea to have a few sentences that are a 'bridge' between your reader's mind and your topic. I feel like I'm starting right away with information about my topic but I don't really know how else to start the paragraph. Any ideas? Also, after reading my introduction over again, I noticed that I don't have a clear thesis statement that 'tells the main point of the information I present'. After getting feedback from some friends, I realize that I need some sort of clincher. My teacher says to make the clincher long enough so I really get to make a good point, but it should NOT stay on the same topic as my essay. I'm totally clueless on how to do this...
With the 'dot com boom, and without that...well, who knows?' part, I'm trying to say that computers have had such a significant impact on us and led to many other new technologies that help our everyday lives. According to my teacher, the 'who knows?' is not a bad way to end my conclusion, but I should keep going with it and make a point.
While I know what I'm suppose to do to fix-up my introduction and conclusion, the words just don't come to mind. I would greatly appreciate it if one of you can give some ideas, or maybe rearrange/rewrite some sentences to give me a good start!
Thanks ahead of time!