Main Street is not a place that you would want to attend daily or at all.
Main Street is not a place that you would want to hang around daily or may be at all.
"Main Street" gets repeated too often and in almost every sentence. You need to pay attention to that.
Have you ever been in a crowded and dirty place, one that makes your skin crawl with disgust and terror? I have and that was during my trip to Main Street for the doctor's appointment. Main Street, Flushing is a disaster area. Streets are filled with traffic and crowds. The sanitation is absolutely terrible and people are ignorant and rude. Main Street is not a place that you would want to attend daily or at all.
... Okkkkk... giving consideration to your teacher's comment, I feel you should give a bit more detailed description about Main Street. Talk about its location and for what it is famous for etc.