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Friendship-We will never apart!


MissHanis 1 / 1  
Aug 11, 2011   #1
When I was wrote this,the Earth was drizzle by the rain. Fresh smell of ground that mixed up with the grass was so peaceful and tranquilize me who was just came back from tuition class. This mildness and bliss was bringing me down to memory lane. Which is very nostalgic.

Last 2007,I met April.-and oh hi! I'm August! During that time,I just started my junior high school and have no friends yet. April was sitting at my back and as friendly as I could be,I approached her first. With a simple Hi,me and her became a friend. Then, I met December,June and October. A year after that,I knew May.

Actually,December and June were my classmates at that time,but because of they were sitting a little bit far from my place,we did not mix well. Just when I was in my second year,I was in the same class with October and May. May is actually a friend of December,so I knew her through December.

And our friendship went well with six members in a group-April,May,June,August(me),October and December.

Let me tell little much about our backgrounds.

Me (August),April and October were the second daughter of the family while May,june and December were the youngest in their family. August and December have 5 siblings, April and May have 4 of them and June and October have only 3 siblings. All those the youngest were really cat lovers! but not for those 3-the second daughters. We have a lot of common things that we like and we don't and also have the same way of thinking.Don't you think it is interesting? I do. Truly. We are meant to be together, I guess.

Life is unexpected. Really.We go through hardship and happiness together.Three years we are together,something was really unexpected suddenly came up. In drizzling days,there was a storm.We were truly bogged down by that 'nightmare'. Anyhow,we were still together to face the hardship. Oprah Winfrey once said "Everyone wants to ride with you in the limo, but what you want is someone who will take the bus with you when the limo breaks down." This thing was really suited our friendships.We cried together as it was too hard for us to go through that hardship.It was really hard. But then,still we can smile when we realised that the strong bond between us was too tight and strong. I thought nothing can beat our friendship. And it is important for us to believe that after a hurricane,comes a rainbow.

Later,we were in senior high school. October has been offered to further her studies in better school. A boarding school,I mean. It was heart-breaking to let her go. Really. The last day before she left,I cried my eyes out. Its really hard to separate from someone that you have been through thick and thin together,you know. But,like I said,we were meant together. Two weeks after that. October came back to old school for us. For me,April,May,June and December. We were so glad to see her at school on that day. She was like a sunshine behind the clouds brought out our past gloomy days when she was not next to us.

And now,we were still together in our final year-a senior year. Having a great moment everyday with laugh and jokes,it was really a big times! and I will miss it when the school days are over soon. And I had asked someone, " Is it possible to stay together forever?" and he said "nothing impossible." I hope that our friendship will last longer. Hopefully.

"When we honestly ask ourselves which person in our lives mean the most to us, we often find that it is those who, instead of giving advice, solutions, or cures, have chosen rather to share our pain and touch our wounds with a warm and tender hand. The friend who can be silent with us in a moment of despair or confusion, who can stay with us in an hour of grief and bereavement, who can tolerate not knowing, not curing, not healing and face with us the reality of our powerlessness, that is a friend who cares."

- Henri J.M. Nouwen (The Road to Daybreak: A Spiritual Journey)

p/s:I really hope that someone will check my essay and correct it. And please share with me the bombastic words that can replace those simple words that I used above. Thank you people :D
Emmawyy - / 2  
Aug 11, 2011   #2
When I was wrote writing this, the Earth was drizzle drizzling by the rain. Fresh smell of ground that mixed up with the grass was so peaceful and tranquilize me who was just came back from tuition class. This mildness and bliss was bringing me down to memory lane. Which , which is very nostalgic.

Your story is quite impressing, but the are little mistiakes in grammer.
OP MissHanis 1 / 1  
Aug 12, 2011   #3
Thanks Emmawyy ..uh,i knew.i was no that good in English actually as this is my second language. Thanks for helping :D


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