Hello, this is the first time posting on this forum. I would like some feedback on this introduction paragraph i am writing for my American studies class. The assignment is to research and write an essay about your own family tree. Thanks
Families are unique, they can be prodigious or meager. Some families have characteristics that make them irregular, while some that make them typical. Many families can be traced back to their inception. The place that it all began. This method of discovering is called genealogy. Genealogy is a line of work where one discovers the predecessors of his or her family tree. This process can be very stressful and strenuous at times, involving many dead ends, and many disappointments. However, in the end after it all plays out, it is well worth it.
Families are unique: they can be prodigious or meager. Some families have characteristics that make them irregular, while some that make them typical. Many families can be traced back to their inception, t he place that it all began. This method of discovering is called genealogy, a line of work where one discovers the predecessors of his or her family tree. This process can be very stressful and strenuous at times, involving many dead ends, and manypossibly disappointments. However, in the end after it all plays out, it is well worth it.
I scratched "Some families have characteristics that make them irregular, while some that make them typical." because you said in the first sentence that families are unique, and guess "typical" isn't suitable here. Maybe you can try some characteristics? And perhaps put some more antonyms after prodigious and meager?
Anyway, it's just my thoughts. LOL.
BTW, I suppose that this is undergraduate admission discussion here?
Thanks for the feedback it really Helped. Yes it is.
You're very welcome. I'm asking because you are actually posting a course work essay here in the undergraduate admission section, but guess that doesn't hurt much. BTW, this is also my first post here. Good luck with everything!
