Good afternoon :)
Here are my thoughts:
"There has been a growing number of young people deciding
to take study breaks
for work or vacations
before continuing to pursue a
higher education. Some parents believed it is advantageous,
whereas others were not convinced and strongly opposed to it. Make sure that all of your subject agree; you began the piece discussing a plural subject (people) so all of your following nouns and verbs should be plural to agree (deciding, breaks, vacations).
certain some young people who made this
decision were motivated by a
few benefits caused By what?
. First, it helps them to become more confident and independent. The youngsters experience real life
challenges and obstacles by staying out and working for a
living.This life experience assists them in understanding the
meaning of life and developing
more mature personalities Since you used "them" you must use "personalities" because "them" is plural
Second, different life experiences gained during the gap year period clarify their ideas and choices of study. They are more self-aware and know exactly what career path they would like to pursue in adulthood.
Despite some benefits
, there are some drawbacks about taking time off to
study. First of
all, some people might find difficulty in adjusting
themselves back to a
routine of study. They lose
motivation and interest
in acquiring a
Moreover, they are putting themselves at risk of not being able to enroll in
as some colleges strictly control the enrollment application and would prefer students to have their
further studies immediately after secondary school.
In addition, it is
costly to stop studying temporarily
at this golden age as young people are
not only spending their money but their precious time in exploring the world and themselves.They may feel left behind or over-aged after rejoining college or university by seeing fellow
peers that are seniors
or nearly finishing their studies
By and large, taking a
gap year for work or a
vacation before joining a
university is definitely
not for everyone. Young people should be
advised to do some research beforehand and understand the objective Or consequences?
of the decision."