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IELTS Essay: Suggestions for the densely populated countries.


shaddy 17 / 47 7  
Apr 16, 2013   #1
Counties such as China, India and Japan have unsustainable population growths. In fact many experts are of the opinion that the population 'explosion' which is now a very worrying concern, is the most serious threat to life on this planet.

Give some suggestions to address this problem.


Advancement in medicine and science has a great impact on the world's population. Unlike past, nowadays birth rate has increased and death rate has decreased. Countries like India, China and Japan are considered overpopulated. This overpopulation creates many issues for the people. Some of them are hunger, lack of education, resources limitation and lack of employment. In the following essay I will propose some suggestions to control the population.

First of all, population control is possible only with the individual's co-operation. People of the overpopulated countries should be educated to have smaller families. Moreover, efforts should be made in order to realize them the benefits of having one or two kids only. Benefits such as happy family, more opportunities and healthy lifestyle should be promoted through advertisements and media. Furthermore, people should be educated to adopt birth control methods such as pregnancy termination pills, contraception and surgical operation etc. Educating people in this manner will surely be helpful in having fewer children, so this will control the population.

Secondly, at government level there must be laws regarding birth. Like in China, families having more than an allowed number of children must be fined. In addition to this, government should put tax on the families for additional babies. By regulations from government people will be compelled to have smaller families and hence, population will be reduced to the required level one day.

To summarize, both government and individual level help is needed to control the population in the over-populated countries.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 16, 2013   #2
This overpopulation creates many issues for the people.

... actually, this becomes serious because we have limited resources to share

Some of them are hunger, lack of education, resources limitation and lack of employment. I

unemployment is a better usage... give it some thought!

People of the overpopulated countries should be educated to have smaller families.

People of overpopulated countries should be promoted to have smaller families by educating them on family planning methods.

Secondly, at government level there must be laws regarding birth.

.... I fear whether this is possible everywhere. :D

To summarize, both government and individual level help is needed to control the population in the over-populated countries.

In conclusion, efforts should be made by both individuals and the state to control and maintain population at a healthy level.
You write good English.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Apr 16, 2013   #3
In the following essay I will propose some suggestions to control the population.

... this is your essay... may be you can say " in the following paragraphs"

Countries like India, China and Japan are considered overpopulated.

.... what the prompt suggests is that these countries not only overpopulated, but have unsustainable population growths. So, these countries need to bring the growth rates to a sustainable level. You need to highlight that point.

First of all, population control is possible only with the individual's co-operation.

First, the individuals need to co-operate a lot in efforts of achieving an appropriate level of population.

Moreover, efforts should be made in order to realize them the benefits of having one or two kids only. Benefits such as happyhappier family life , more opportunities and healthy lifestyle should be promoted through advertisements and media.

Moreover, people should be promoted to have maximum one or two kids per family. This can be done by educating them about the benefits of smaller families such as happier family life, more opportunities, healthier lifestyle etc. Advertisements and media can be used extensively in such efforts.


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