Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational; otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree??
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Today, many parents want their children's leisure activities to have educational component, while their kids may just want to play during their leisure time. I disagree with this philosophy of education. [/quote]
Compare your prompt and the your first statement... Your statement covers only a part of the prompt . i.e. some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational... However, you dont cover the other part, i.e. they think that anything which does not contain an educational component is a waste of time is not implicated by saying kids love only fun. So as the reader, I have a question , what you don't agree with.
Try to set up a good alignment with your prompt always.... It's very important for this task : )