You do have a tendency to pack too much into your sentences, and this sets you up to make mistakes in grammar and punctuation.
While it's a common theme for most young people to go on vacation where they know there will be a variety of activities in which they can try new things I, however, like to go where I can unwind, take in the scenery, and enjoy the company of my family and friends My ideal vacation would be camping in the quit mountains of a state park or relaxing on the shore of a beautiful beach.
This is an insanely long sentence!
Let's assume that you meant to start new sentences where you have capital letters. Now we have:While it's a common theme for most young people to go on vacation where they know there will be a variety of activities in which they can try new things I, however, like to go where I can unwind, take in the scenery, and enjoy the company of my family and friends
. My ideal vacation would be camping in the quit mountains of a state park or relaxing on the shore of a beautiful beach.
The first sentence is still much too long! Let's break it down like this:
While it's a common theme forM ost young people
like to go on vacation where they know there will be a variety of activities
in whichand they can try new things
. I, however, like to go where I can unwind, take in the scenery, and enjoy the company of my family and friends
.In this passage, we can see your primary problems: Too many words, and not enough punctuation marks. Edit by taking out empty phrases such as "it's a common theme" and adding puntuation marks to shorten and separate your sentences.