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IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio.



anhduy_tranThreads: 2
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Author: Duy Anh Tran
   
Aug 31, 2010, 12:35pm   #1
topic: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio as media for communication information. State which you consider to be the most effective.

In the modern life, there are many technology advances that they are used for communicating ,such as television, radio and books. Althought the primary usefulness of them is spreading information, actually they can affect people in many ways depending on our purpose to use them.

It is no doubt that most of our basic knowledge comes from books. Picture books, novels , academic criteria ,etc., from which we can achieve a lagre amount of information as a little kid to a mature are printed in paper. Books teach us about the surroundings with the unlimited imagination. However, in some cases, books seem to be unabblianced and out of reach for the poors and illiterates.

As regard to radio, it can be finded more interesting than books as a informative tool. Radio can surve human beings with the updated information and the enjoyable music. Moreover, it is useful to listen radio anywhere and anytime just with a headphone or mobilephone. On the other hand, there are less people listen to radio than thay do before as the result from poor sounds in the noisy place.

Personally, i believe that television is the fantastic invention in 20th century for its advantages. In these days, one can stay at home and watch what happens in the different parts of the world with the vivid image and exciting sound. In addition, we can relax after the hours in work place to enjoy wide range of channels and attractive shows on TV. Nevertheless, many recent researchs point out the negative effects of television. Kids,as the typical example, who switch on tv very soon may have the aggressive behaviors if they watch unappropriate programs, for instance, violent films or gameshow, the list goes on.

As far as i am concerned, television influences people the most beside others media. With the bomb in technology development, human can find many others tool to communicate,but television still have the strong effects for the next long time.



Shadow93Threads: 9
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Author: L. Chiang
   
Sep 1, 2010, 08:39am   #2
Please check your spelling!! It is common courtesy to make sure your spelling is correct before you ask other people to help you!!
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In the modern life, there are many technological advances that they are used for communicating; such as television, radio and books. Although their primary use[s]fulness of them[/s] is spreading information, actually they can affect people in many ways depending on their purpose to use them.

It is no doubt that most of our basic knowledge comes from books. Picture books, novels , academic papers ,etc., from which we can achieve a large amount of information as a little kid to a mature are printed in paper. Books teach us about the surroundings with the unlimited imagination. However, in some cases, books seem to be unabblianced (WHAT?) and out of reach for the less able.

As regard to radio, it can be finded more interesting than books as a informative tool. Radio can serve human beings with the updated information and the enjoyable music. Moreover, it is easy to listen radio anywhere and anytime just with a headphone or mobile phone. On the other hand, there are less people listening to radio than they did before because of poor sound quality in noisy places

Did not finish correcting below.
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Personally, i believe that television is the fantastic invention in 20th century for its advantages. In these days, one can stay at home and watch what happens in the different parts of the world with the vivid image and exciting sound. In addition, we can relax after the hours in work place to enjoy wide range of channels and attractive shows on TV. Nevertheless, many recent researchs point out the negative effects of television. Kids,as the typical example, who switch on tv very soon may have the aggressive behaviors if they watch unappropriate programs, for instance, violent films or gameshow, the list goes on.

As far as i am concerned, television influences people the most beside others media. With the bomb in technology development, human can find many others tool to communicate,but television still have the strong effects for the next long time.


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Sep 2, 2010, 09:18am   #3
Shadow93:
make sure your spelling is correct

Yes, if you use Microsoft Word as your word proc. program or if you use Firefox as your web browser, you will have a built in spell checker function. So, use the technology to get the spelling correct.

I'll correct the rest:

Personally, I believe that television is the fantastic invention in 20th century for its advantages. In These days, one can stay at home and watch what happens in the different parts of the world with the vivid image and exciting sound. ---- very good!

In addition, we can relax after the hours at the workplace and enjoy a wide range of channels and attractive shows on TV.

Nevertheless, many recent research studies point out the negative effects of television. Kids,as the typical example, who switch on television, very soon may have the aggressive behaviors if they watch inappropriate programs, for instance, violent films or game shows.--- I don't know if game shows make people aggressive!!

I think you are trying to say 'explosion' instead of bomb:
As far as I am concerned, television influences people more than other forms of media. With the bomb explosion in technology development, humans can find many other tool to communicate, but television still has the strongest effects. for the next long time.


divya2010Threads: 3
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Author: tadi divya rajasri
   
Sep 2, 2010, 10:34am   #4
thetre a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. and its spelt as although. sentences should be short n crisp.please check the dictionary meaning of the words you have used. its boom in the last sentence. bomb changes the very meaning of the sentence.




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