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If I were you, I would start analyzing the prompt to see how and what to do, like this:Statement: It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the
influence of the media on our lives.
Task: Discuss the
advantages and
disadvantages of
living in a media-rich society.
Have a look at the intro:
Nowadays the mass media is getting one of the important thing in our everyday life, it is growing respectively. In fact, it has a lot of pros and cons. In my opinion, the advantages are overweight the drawbacks of it.
You need an extra work to paraphrase the intro, by having much consideration for the keywords (see boldface)
there are many types of media such as TV, the Internet, newspaper, magazines and radio
In IELTS this is called 'shopping list", just making list of seperate points. By doing this, the assessors think that your writing is not well-developed.
every people
Write 'every person'.
People is used as the plural of 'person'
printing anti-social information which can affect to our overview.
Like what? This should be
precisean influx of money
Write an influx of cash.
Influx collocates with moneyby the way
Omit this one. You don't need to use 'lazy expressions', especially ones that belong more to oral communication
the improvement of international media many other cultures and countries which differ with each other suffer from decrease of their own traditional value
A lack of clarity in this sentence. Better redo. Then check the grammatical mechanics
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