Apsari 7 / 20 1 Apr 23, 2014 #1Thanks guys for coming in my writing of task II again. Like usual give advice and in which part i have to improve my writing. :)Inventors are not as important to society of doctors. to what extend do you agree with this statement ?================================================================= ===========================Many people think that a doctor is more important than investors. They think the doctors can help society from their illness. In their opinion, healthy is more important than other things. In my opinion, I agree with them because doctors can help the sufferers and to safe someone still alife is a highest regards for doctors.I agree that the doctors is a good person because they safe the sufferers from their illness. Many sufferers got their disease and they visit the doctors to help them to get health again. For example, many young doctors help people which live in small village. They help the society because they know about their job desk to help human still healthy. In my country, the young doctors do not get high salary when they help young children or adult people. Usually young a young doctor will live in small area for work and practice their knowledge to help sufferers before to be a real doctor.In my opinion, I agree when someone can help a human life, it also a highest achievement especially for doctors. Not many people want to learn about healthy subject and practice their knowledge in society. Besides, the human always give their best regards to the doctor. However, the doctors do not get a high salary as their high achievement. Doctors work for humanity and their relatives healthy.In conclusion, someone who works as a doctor always in the best place of job section. Because their humanities to help people and animals also, it makes doctors have a diamond job. I agree the doctors help someone for humanity and not for money or sales media.
Abdurasul 32 / 86 4 Apr 23, 2014 #2Many people think that a doctor is more important than investors. They think the doctors can help society from their illness. In their opinion, healthy is more important than other things. In my opinion, I agree with them because doctors can help the sufferers and tosafe save someone still alife alive is a highest regards for doctors.It is not so strong introduction. You haven't given any hook.Follow Dumi's structure!Hope this helps!
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553 Apr 23, 2014 #3Many people think that a doctor is more important than investors.In your prompt it is "inventors" and here you have mentioned "investors". These two words have very different meanings;Inventor - a person who invented a particular process or device or who invents things as an occupationInvestor - someone who commits capital in order to gain financial returnsWhich one is the right word?
OP Apsari 7 / 20 1 Apr 23, 2014 #4In your prompt it is "inventors" and here you have mentioned "investors". These two words have very different meanings;Inventor - a person who invented a particular process or device or who invents things as an occupationI mean inventors. I think i misunderstanding.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553 Apr 23, 2014 #5Ok, I see :DThey think the doctors can help society from their illness.save others lives which is an honorable deed that cannot be compared to any other contribution.They think the doctors can help society from their illness. In their opinion, healthy is more important than other things.Well, don't spend too much time in introducing the background of the issue. Your aim should be to finish the task fast, but completely. Spending too much time in one section is not going to help you :)
