'the development of science' - IELTS TASK2- TECHNOLOGY

Some people think technology is better for improving the environment than living simpler life. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, the quantity of innovation is rise and rise because of scientists` effort. While some people consider technology ought to make people`s life simpler rather than to protect and improve the environment, I suppose that technology plays a dominant role in the field of environmental friendly.

It is no doubt that our living environment has been damaged for many years. Especially in last century, government encouraged manufacturers to enlarge the scale of manufacturing blindly regardless of heavily ruining living environment. Therefore, technology, which is allocated uncountable money in, should pay for its initial responsibility-correct ancestors` wrong decision. At least, it is expected that new technology is able to better the environment as comfortable as a hundred century ago.

Moreover, with the development of science, innovation cannot meet our requirement today. Since a great number of problems involved environment are yet tackled, such as the over-rely-on the fossil fuels and discharge of waste water, technology has long way to go. First of all, high-tech innovations are proposed to find out new, clean and economical resources to alter the exited fuels, reducing CO2 and H2S. Second, purifying the waste water is also crucial. Either cleaning the materials before manufacturing or purifying the remains before discharge can address the problem efficiently. Last but not least, the efficiency of manufacturing should be enhanced, decreasing the time of producing so that can reduce the polluted air emission from the factory.

In conclusion, rather than simplify people`s life, technology is expected to improve the environment. Only having better living environment can human being live healthier and longer, an achievement that is more significant than anything.

:-)))any comments are appreciated.

I think you answered the main part of it, but you should add one more thing (it is important). Why do you think the effect of technology on environment was more significant than that on the people's life style? I mean you should compare these two issues and the influences of technology on them.

Moreover, with the development of science, innovations cannot meet our today's requirements today. I think the word demand is better than using the word requirement.

It is no doubt that our living environment has been damaged for many years. excellent start for the paragraph. ;)

I suppose that technology plays a dominant role in the field of environmental friendly .You presented your side nicely but I am uncertain of the phrase "environmental friendly". You can perhaps restate the sentence to... It is agreed that technology plays a dominant role in positive modifications of the environment.

Last but not least is a very common phrase and a little less academic. ;) try not to use them.
and most importantly, where is your summary or conclusion?

Keep practising ;) We can do this! How much score in writing do you need?

I knew that. But i have no idea why effect of technology on people's life is less significant...so i ignored the comparation.. :(((

THANKS!
demand sounds really better than requirement.
Can i use finally to replace Last but not least ?

u cannot find my conclusion????


or u thought this is not a good conclusion? :'(

In wiriting you do not need to look for real reasons to support your ideas. You can lie. For example, you could say that "based on the American Society of Statistics, more than 50% of the new technologies, invented through the last decades, have environmental aims".

lol!! ur a good liar!

i need 6 ...and i going to take ielts this week.

yep. the day after tomorrow..But i got 5.5 last time....so frustrated...