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The day my pet dog died was the most unforgettable day in my life!


kurouske55 1 / 2  
Nov 9, 2013   #1
The most unforgettable moment in my life is the day when my pet dog died. Being just a young innocent boy, I really never understood the meaning of death or the purpose of it. All I could understand is that it comes uninvited unexpectedly and it is inevitable, for all life will come to an end one day. The tragic moment happened when I took my pet dog out for a walk. It was when we reached an intersection and was crossing a pedestrian line when a car turning left immediately rushed to turn after I passed him and all of sudden a loud cry came from my dog. As I look behind me, I saw my dog got run over by the car which did not stopped at all and just drove off. I was there standing, looking and waited for my dog to get up and run around just like he always does, even though blood are gushing out of his mouth and eyes. Tears started to pour out like a waterfall as I carried him to the side of the road. The smell was nauseating and the sticky feeling of the blood on my hand, yet I could not stop holding him as he takes his last remaining breath with agony. I don't know if it's because of my tears or the smell of the blood that makes everything around me seems so dull and dark with his emotionless and motionless body in my tiny arms as I rushed home. To know that just a few hours ago he was whining and giving me the puppy eyes so I could take him to walk but now all of that is over as my dad and I buried him in our yard. I thought of all the good time we had together. He was adorable, playful, energetic and above all he was my best friend. Although it took quite some time for me to get over it as I would always find myself expecting my dog to greet me whenever I come home or getting ready to feed him, only to remember that he is gone. I have learned to accept the up and down of life and the inevitability of death itself. That moment is something I don't want to forget as it taught me something important about life.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Nov 10, 2013   #2
First, you should have a more meaningful title for your essay in the subject field when you open a new thread. It is a forum rule and also it helps you earn more meaningful feedbacks.

I really never understood the meaning of death or the purpose of it.

... how about "purpose of life"?
I really never understood the meaning of death or the purpose of life.

All I could understand is that it comes uninvited unexpectedly and it is inevitable, for all life will come to an end one day.

Well... this is exactly what death means and this sentence gives a different meaning to what you just said in your previous sentence. This one challenges your claim that you didn't understand what death mean. I feel you need to pay attention to this.
OP kurouske55 1 / 2  
Nov 10, 2013   #3
uhmm... So what could i had said to fix it?
OP kurouske55 1 / 2  
Nov 10, 2013   #4
I just want someone to proofread it to see if there is something that doesn't make sense and what i could had put to fix it and if there is any grammar error


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