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technology impact - we should keep the knowledge of traditional skills alive


drodriguez_38 2 / 2  
Jun 16, 2013   #1
THIS IS TRAINING FOR MY IELTS EXAM, PLEASE DO ALL THE RELEVANT COMMENTS AND OBSERVATIONS. THANK YOU!

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The phenomenon of globalisation has leaded us to a wave of change and improvement of our traditional skills and lifestyles. Actually, changes have occurred since a million years ago, and without progress, we wouldn't be where we are. However, I do not totally agree with the opinion that it is pointless to try and keep them alive.

In the Stone Age, the man created the fire by rubbing two stones or two sticks, and he also created other tools as a lance with a stone and a stick in order to hunt for food and cook. These tools allowed him to survive. Currently, we have fire and other tools to get food and live that are much more sophisticated and make our life much easier. Evidently, we developed our technology and those skills that once were traditional have disappeared. It would not be reasonable to keep on producing fire in the same way as we did a million years ago, since change is the key of progress.

Although such ways of life have died out, we know how we created them, where we come from and how we got to where we are, and in my opinion, this is the most important. Therefore, any country may -and, in fact, it must- develop new technologies to improve its productivity and ensure the economic and social development of the citizens, keeping them up to date with the new technologies and teaching them how to use them.

I think that investment in new technologies is as important as training for citizens in order for they to know how to use them, but it is valuable to keep the knowledge of traditional skills alive by teaching the new generations what they were once and how they used to live and work, only because of cultural identity matters.
violetkau1 1 / 6  
Jun 16, 2013   #2
your second paragraph should be should be equally long as the first. and it wiull be better if you start witt firstly,... you can say that by keeping traditional skills alive we provide emplointment in region where there is no other industry. , eg: furniture , pottery, rose-flower... and also that traditional skills make us unique as a nation..

That's my opinion. hope i helped
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jul 3, 2013   #3
The phenomenon of globalisation has leaded us to a wave of change and improvement of our traditional skills and lifestyles

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1. (of windowpanes or a roof) Framed, covered, or weighted with lead.
2. (of gasoline) Containing tetraethyl lead: "leaded fuel"

Actually, changes have occurred since a million years ago, and without progress, we wouldn't be where we are.

.... well... changes take place all the time.... it not only occurred million years ago, but occurs every moment.... So, I think you need to present this idea more logically.


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