I came right over to this thread to see if I could help, because I saw your excellent discussions in some other threads. Thanks for being here and making EssayForum a better resource by adding your ideas!
Death of a parent or sibling (god forbid!) seriously impacts ones life. you actually feel left out when your friends and people around you talk about their respective parent, being very rich or brave or intelligent, when actually you have lost that person.
This is powerful writing! How insightful....
I see some places where you failed to capitalize the first word of a sentence, though. Also, I'll make some small changes:
The death of a parent or sibling (God forbid!) seriously impacts...
Add an apostrophe: one's life.
You actually feel left out when your friends and people around you talk about their respective parents being very rich, brave, or intelligent, when actually you have lost that person.----Thisis my favorite part of the essay. I think you are a profound philosopher.