he is children who is like game but also they have adults who dont like game.
Children like playing games, but adults don't.
There are many reasons about that.
give some examples here
There is statement about game are as important for adult as they are for children so i do strongly support the idea that, it has benefits for adults such as getting money, refresh mind, and getting friend.
Bad grammar. I suggest you to rewrite
Many grammar and sentence problems. 'Yeah, really!'
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