IELTS: Children should begin learning a foreign language; 'every-day habit'

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Education is notable for human life that start from youngster. In addition, foreign language include schooling. There many levels to study foreign language like children level, teenagers and adults. There is statement that children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. I agree with the statement. Furthermore, my reason that language is habit and gives skill to children.

Studying language is habit because we should to repeat every-day. Practice is good a method which uses for studying foreign language. It should begin from children, cause it makes habit on children with way practice. In instance, nowadays play group has studied foreign language to children. Because, the teacher believe that learn foreign language from offspring. it is obvious that, implementation foreign language is better from children. Therefore, making be easy to construct habit.

Skill is ability someone about knowledge which more professional. To getting skill needs time. Therefore, if skill continue to use then increasingly expert. In this case, foreign English is studied from children then it skill increase to future. In particular, children who practice English different with pupil does not study English. Because, children who study English have skill. This example makes it clear that, if pupil learn English start school have more capability than others.

To conclude, youngster should inaugurate study English start from play group. Moreover, foreign language is habit and hand out ability to children.

... this has several issues - grammar, presentation, clarity

Education is an important aspect for everybody that heavily contributes to their success.


All these sentences are very loosely connected. You need to have a good flow and for that you need to have your ideas logically arranged. The sentences need to contain ideas that have a connection with one another. :(

In your first paragraph, I found you try to connect the sentences by putting too much connector words whereas actually the idea of those sentences are still able to be connected without them. Paraphrasing your sentences will be far better.

In your body paragraphs, you should put some additional information to make your reason become more easily to be understood.

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"play group" plural. So, you must write ... play group have studied language to children.

the teacher believes that learn foreign language from offspring.
hey bro,,it is singular

it is obvious that, implementation foreign language is better from children.
I think it is without coma (,)

>> i think your writing will be better if u use other words

i think you should rewrite this paragraph.

Studying language...

Studying foreign language should be a habit because to learn a foreign language we should repeat it everyday. Doing practice is good for learning new language.

is this you mean?
Evidently, constructing a good habit of learning foreign language for children is always better action


is this you mean?
Children learn how to use an English language properly as an essential skill for a better future


is this you mean?
Schoolchildren speaking English language are more likely to have excellent academic credentials

Noteworthy:
Read as many samples of IELTS writings/ authentic English texts as you can to improve your writing skills. This help you find some ideas and improve your vocabulary and grammar.

Well, the last sentence of your intro is not serving any purpose for your essay and instead it breaks your smooth flow. It is always nicer to conclude your intro expressing your opinion.


.... studying language is not a habit, but an exercise or a lesson. May be you try some other way to express this idea;
A language needs to be practiced regularly to develop its proficiency.