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'censorhip'; Creative artists should have freedom to express their views


dragosp 2 / 2  
Jun 17, 2013   #1
Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is well known that during the last decades artists have been treated more like a voice of the population, due to their ability to express ideas and opinions using a lot of expression trying not to insult to system directly, by using subliminal messages, being indispensible to human's soul and life. This fact was possible until censorship was settled and their freedom was restricted.

To my mind being an artist means a huge amount of creativity, freedom and last but not least motivation. It can be widely acknowledged that 30 years ago, in the Eastern Europe, when the communists where leading the countries, artists used to develop their creations, even if we are talking about poems, movies or songs, by making a directly link to the political views. In this case censorhip was more like an obstacle in the front the artists and if they really wanted to express their personal views and ideas they had to risk their freedom.

On balance, things had an impressive turning nowadays. The governments haved disabled most of these restrictions giving artists the possibility of expressing their ideas without complaining about the strictness of censorhip. However, sometimes they lose their control and do unsuitable things such as wearing sexy clothes, singing worthless songs, drawing pornographies, etc. It conflicts with their culture and moral standards. Therefore, government should have some restrictions to limit these cases, as well as to preserve traditional value and nation image.

While it is important to acknowledge the value of the both sides I personally tend to believe that things had changed a lot on this side, and the government restrictions are not as severe as it use to be in the past.
shadman19922 21 / 74 10  
Jun 17, 2013   #2
"due to their ability to express ideas and opinions using a lot of expression (while ) trying not to insult to system directly"

"This fact was possible until censorship was settled (Use introduced, brought about )and their freedom was restricted"

This essay is rife with grammatical mistakes and misuse of words, and I won't point out all of them. Besides, that the biggest issue of the essay is that you HAVE NOT developed your point of view at all. All you did was take a stance, provide some examples, make a few statements without elaborating on them, and did not connect your point of view with the details.

I assume that this is a SAT or a GRE essay. If so the score is between 1-2.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592  
Jun 17, 2013   #3
It is well known that during the last decades artists have been treated more like a voice of the population

.... It's not just last decades... Even in ancient times, the artists used to talk to their people through their creative work.

This fact was possible until censorship was settled and their freedom was restricted.

... this too is not presented well.... when was censorship was intorduced? You have to talk in a bit more detail. Also, I found the following essay written on the same topic and I feel it's worth reading.


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