When I was in High school, my favorite subject was the Korean Literature.
|Most friends of mine Most of my friends used to fall asleep in the class because they felt thethat subject was boring and old-fashioned. However,My belief was different then my friends my eyes were widened and I loved and always felt excited for my literature class to begun felt excited as the Literature class has started. I thought the subject was leading me to theenhancing my horizons of knowledge of a new world that I had never experienced before in my life.
Through the reading of variety genre of the Literature, I could
feelimagine my ancestor's life and culture in the that specific era. EspeciallyLikely in the old poems, I noticed their values such as loyalty to the nation, religious attitudes influenced by shamanism, Buddhism and Confucianism. Moreover, people started to write an essay which is more narrative and descriptive based on their usual lifeIt is not clear here when they started and why they started essay writing, try making it more explainatory keeping this in mind that the reader don't know wnything about your language and culture. Through the reading, I could feelanticipate their sorrow, happiness and depicted love of nature and man. For me, it was fascinated to find out someone's feeling through out the short piece of the Literature.
As well as reading and analyzing others' masterpieces, my teacher, Mrs. Lee asked us to again sentence is not very clear where it begins and where it ends create some of the writing based on the characters of the Literature that we learned in the class. Sometime, I pretended to be a soldier who was filled with loyalty towards the Kingdom and described my emotions in the short poem. In addition, she made You should mention who (you teacher )us to write a love letter to the main characters in the Literature. At the first time, students including me complained to the teacher because we were not familiar with the work. However, through the writing processing, I learned and practiced how to imagine other people's status and emotions.
Reading and writing process in the Korean Literature subject was one of my communication way to the world and history. I could access to various styles of Literature in different ages from old times to the modern ages. It always refreshed my thoughts and feelings during the school years.
i am also preparing for cbest, it is hard so don't loose hope just keep practicing, i think in the end that would help us.
In your essay your usage is ok and things are not clear so try writing it more clear, your story should be clear in one reading[font#FF0000][/font]
Other flaw which i found was you were not sticking to the thesis sentence or topic, At the begining it was korean langauge, later you ended up with benefits of writing and reading.
Instead you were suppose to say about the subject which you studies back then, liked and has some positive effect or has influenced you.