A new CBEST essay. Please advise! Thank you!
Topic: If you could be any age that you wanted to be, what age would you choose? In a composition, identify the age you consider to be ideal. Support your position with specific reasons and example.
21 Years Old
Each stage of life is interesting and I would like to go back in time to live again starting with childhood. If I could be any age I could choose, I would like to be 21 years old. The younger stages of life are beautiful; because everybody has dreams about their own future. At the age of 21, anybody is ready to choose a direction for their own life. All the years in our lives are important for our lifetime, but I believe that the age of 21 is the most important.
The first reason I would like to be 21 years old is because at that age I became an adult. I decided to go to University to become a math teacher. I remember vividly, and would like to relive the moments when I filed the application for the University with a major in mathematics. For me it was a very important moment in my life. At that moment I decided my life's direction and that meant I had become an adult.
The second reason that I would like to be 21 years old is because I would like to retake the exam for admission to the math department. It was very difficult to compete, with more than three students competing for a single admission space. I took and passed this difficult exam. After I received the results, I was very happy and I celebrated my success with my family and friends. I love formidable challenges; and at the age of 21 I had met with one and overcame it.
Finally, but not lastly, I would like to be 21 years old, because it was in that year that I decided to get married. My wedding was beautiful. It took place at a church in the morning and in the afternoon I celebrated my wedding at a restaurant. I invited a lot of friends and everything was wonderful. For this reason, I would like once again to be 21 years old.
I consider 21 to be the ideal age for life. At this age, I made some of the biggest decisions of my life. I had dreams that have now become reality. I would like to be 21 years old now.Hmm... This is fine, but simplistic. I wonder if you might want to say something about valuing what you have learned in the years since or perhaps recognizing the challenges that 21 year olds face, just to make it a bit more complex.
