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Topic: In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution can you suggest?
Poor student behavior is a major problem faced by schools in the recent years. I would like to provide reasons to clarify my opinion about this statement.
In the first place, there are several reasons which can cause a bad student behavior in school. One of them is lack of family roll that is indispensable in a child's treatment. For example, when students have a problem with their parents, they feel sad and depressed, Most of the time, they think about the ways how to solve this problem. As a consequence, when the students face conditions that impair normal operation with their family, their bad behavior is inescapable.
Another reason for problematic behavior among children is that some of them have inadequacies with their financial issues which contribute to their bad behavior in their school. In addition to this point, the children will not have an incentive to continue their studying and it results in missing their classes. Take the case of, the child will work part time or do illegal things, for instance, stealing money from others in order to pay his tuition fees. In fact, these circumstances make the students exhausted and help enlarge their unfavorable behavior.
As a solution, from my point of view, both parents and teachers have to be careful about their attitude to the children. Parents have to pay more attention to their children. What is more, there is a slogan that ''Speak to people in their language''. In this regard, I believe that in some cases, it would be better if teachers try to be in touch with the children by following this slogan. Furthermore, by using this way, they can easily know the child's problem and solution for this trouble.
So based on all the above mentioned points, one can safely conclude that the reasons, for example, problems with family, lack of financial issues can cause a lawless behavior of the students in their school.