CAE - Report on foreign language learning in your country

Hi guys.I'm preparing for the CAE exam, I have some difficulties at the Writing part and I need some feedbacks from your. Thanks in advance!

Here is the task:
A leading educational publisher is interested in language learning in different countries.You have been asked to write a report on foreign language learning in your country.In your report you should deal with:

- the languages poeple learn,who learns them and where they learn them
- recommendations for improving language-learning in your country

Write your report.

Foreign languages learning in my country

Introduction
The aim of this report is to comment on the foreign languages that people learn in my country,to explain who learns them and where are they learned and to recommend changes that could be made to improve language-learning.

Popular languages
To know at least one foreign language nowadays is necessary.The most spoken languages which are learned in my country are English,German and French.Approximately sixty percent of the people are learning English because it is the most important and spoken language worldwide.There are some who prefer French or German just because they were told not to learn English as it is too common and choose another one which helps them performing in their future career or being promoted at their job.

Aspects of foreign languages
The majority of people who learn foreign languages in my country are teenagers,adults and business people.In my country, there are also some elders that try to speak different languages just for their passions or to be able to communicate with their nephews.Most of the people learn them at school or they take private classes to improve their level of English,French or German.Those who can not afford attending private classes study foreign languages at home from books or from making exercises on the internet .

Recommended changes
I would recommend all the parents to take their young children to private classes because when we are young we learn a language more easily.Furthermore,I believe that having native teachers in schools would have the effect of more people learning that language in a creative way.Watching movies with subtitles in that respective language can be a an educative solution too.