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"my best friend Lenka" - DESCRIPTION OF A PERSON



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Apr 19, 2010, 12:35pm   #1
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DESCRIPTION OF A PERSON

I would like to talk about my best friend Lenka. I am so lucky to have her.
Without her I would not be as happy as I am now. I have known her for my whole life. We are neighbors so I see her often.

Lenka is small and quite slim. She has got an oval face with bright blue eyes and a big mouth. She has long brown wavy hair but she usually wears it in a ponytail. She is quite beautiful, especially when she smiles.

She always seems to be in a good mood. We have nearly the same hobbies and sometimes the same opinions. She always brings out the best in me by being positive and cheerful.
She is like a part of my family. I trust her as much as I trust my close family member. I find her very honest; she always says what she thinks. It can be useful sometimes .For example when we go shopping she tells me frankly what fits me and what not.
We are really close to each other; she can tell if I'm lying even if I am keeping a straight face! I don't know how she does it!
I don't know how it is possible but I am never bored with her.

Sometimes she tends to be stubborn, she never admits her fault. But she is stubborn only with her parents, but we have never argued.

I hope our friendship will be long and won't ever end.



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Apr 19, 2010, 01:07pm   #2
she always says what she thinks. It can be useful sometimes. - why "sometimes"?:-) it is a positive trait. I wish all people around me had this feature of character.

Sometimes she tends to be stubborn; she never admits her fault. But she is stubborn only with her parents, but we have never argued. - this phrase seems unsuitable to its place. it looks segregated.

I liked your essay, very sincere writing.


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Apr 20, 2010, 04:56pm   #3
She has got an oval face with bright blue eyes and a big smiling mouth.---In English, saying someone has a big mouth means they talk too much! :-)

She has long, brown, wavy hair, but she usually wears it in a ponytail. She is quite beautiful, especially when she smiles.

She always seems to be ...

.. what fits me and what does not.

We are really close to each other; she can tell if I'm lying even if I am keeping a straight face! I don't know how she does it! These sentences are very well-writen.

I don't know how it is possible, but I am never bored with her.

Sometimes she tends to be stubborn; she never admits her faults. She is stubborn only with her parents, though. She and I have never argued.


Nice job!! I like it.




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